Black Poetry : WITH LOVE, PLAIN.

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by plainrhythm, Nov 17, 2004.

  1. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she held, loved, caressed you,
    fed you nature's red kisses, dripping
    with sweet brown heavenlies of chocolate.
    you sighed and kissed her the same way you
    did with me last week.

    she giggled, touched your soft skin with
    a feather, making you sweat like a worker
    bee in early summer. I caught myself picturing me
    instead of her next to you, wearing that ring...

    wait. i think i have that ring, the one you proposed
    with? so you can't even have the decency to buy a
    different one?! slowly, i get up, walking towards you,
    planning a sweet hello.

    hello. it's not what you think?! really? is it a dream?
    nah. i just... please... i love you plain... enough
    to kiss her?

    you love me enough to kiss her, my best friend,
    i guess we share everything, even best friends.
    but for you she's more than that... you could've
    at least used your own bed!

    i come back to you, now the two of you shocked,
    wondering what to do; i'm holding a tray,
    two cups of tea and start cleaning the room,
    don't mind me... i'm just cleaning, get back to
    your tea it's getting cold...

    baby look... look what? i know you hate me...
    i don't hate you... stop this! what?! say something!
    i hate her!

    it could've been anyone, but you chose the most
    beautiful girl, the one my envy was directed to each
    time, model, the type usher would sing about...
    my best friend... or best enemy?
    i have no title for her now, she's yours...

    i could put her in an envelope for you, signed
    and sealed with a kiss...
    marked: WITH LOVE, PLAIN.
     
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    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like this is soooo romatical :nuts:
     
  3. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you naujae!!!!!
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :welldone: :hearthis: PLAIN HAS STRUCK AGAIN
    AONE DROP
     
  5. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THEONE has graced my poem with his presence...
    thank you THEONE!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    da sweet moment
    da beauty a love divine
    this was off da hook just plain awesome
    flow on wow!!
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    o m goodness sista what a taking place of events
    did it really happen that way?
    wow...i dont know if i coulda been you or her or whomever lol
    that sort of situation is too stifling on the spirit
    but this was a topsy turvy read sista
    well written
    :)
     
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    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you thank you thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    $$RICH$$ - thank you for your comment, you are an inspiration!
    triniti424 - it happened in a way... thank you.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a awesome flow
    and i really enjoyed this poetic trip

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    On the one hand, the descriptive beauty of this piece was gripping. On the other, the "I" in this piece, took reality and stared it squarely in the eye. Whew...I think this was an awesome write poet.
     
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