Black Poetry : Wish

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  1. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wishing on a star
    Telling it my hearts desire
    I can always whisper my deepest thought
    and feelings knowing that it will be forever safe.
    Wishing on a star
    Looking for the future
    uncertain of what path to follow
    Lookin to the heavens for guidance
    because Heaven only knows
    Wishing on a star
    and expecting an answer to the
    hopes and dreams that my heart holds.
    Wishing on a star and thankful
    that the star is there for me to
    wish on.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thatgirl74:
    Very nice flow. May all your wishes
    come true.:)


    Much Luv
     
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    [​IMG] The whole is lovely but the last 3 lines really sealed this for me!
     
  4. thatgirl74

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    4EVERLUV
    cherryblossom
    Thanks as always for the feedback.
    And thanks for feelin my flow
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello Thatgirl...

    I envision a star in a midnight sky, falling to grant a wish to a faithful heart.
    There is a sweet innocence in this piece that I much enjoyed.

    Thanks for sharing.:)


    Feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
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    There is a lot of beauty in the stars at night, it inspires hopes & dreams.
    So ain't a thang wrong with wishing...great piece, poetess.

    epiphany:heart:
     
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    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    COCO thanks for the feedback and enjoying my words!
    epiphany thank you for the feedback!
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i love the quietness of this like it was whispered onto the page
    great write
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    for within da star so be me.......... from above this was beautiful
     
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    Such a peaceful serenity I found within this piece.
     
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