- Jul 2, 2003
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First I will take the poem as you wrote it. I like the poem.
What I am writing is what I read. Not necessarily what you meant. So in that context let me go off on a tangent. I also see what Deepy and 1Poet saw in the poem. But I see something deeper too.
" The clear white morning " representing the race of white men. Their ideology and thinking of themselves.
" The blinding of us " referring to the African American community. What I read in the poem is the freezing of progress in America of others. Namely Black Americans.
In the stanza " Praying the snowing it will stop, is referring to the oppressions and change we often pray for in our lives. You know we are some praying folks, always asking in prayer what we can't get here on earth. So let the white race stop falling on us like a blanket of snow, that cripples a city.
I liked the poem. I thought it causes the reader to open up to what he/she feels. This is what a good poem composition is about. Having more than one interpretation leaves growth for the reader and the writer to enjoy different aspects of a poem.
Like 1Poet, he saw snow, and Deepy saw this as a reference to weather...and snow as in cocaine. It is in the reader of poetry to interpret the meaning of the poem.
Everything looked
Pure and white
but the feeling went away
and with it did the colors
and true colors make a day
so what reason it gives to stay
In this I read that without all of the races of color. The world is a bland color globe, and every hue is significant to its existence. If we aren't welcome here, ( so what reason it gives to stay ) then why should we stay?
I think you are well on your way to dropping some great poems. Work on your expressions and getting the meaning clear and you will grow. We all are growing know that. Poetry isn't finished with us yet!
" I have to say that I wrote this for myself, meaning I didn't pay attention to the reader at all.
I just wrote down what came up in my mind."
I do this myself. So there is nothing wrong with this type of writing. It should convey the poets thoughts first, it will please many readers. As you write and are taking your a reader into consideration, do your best to not loose the feelings, content or meaning you want to convey doing so. Keep flowing.
What I am writing is what I read. Not necessarily what you meant. So in that context let me go off on a tangent. I also see what Deepy and 1Poet saw in the poem. But I see something deeper too.
" The clear white morning " representing the race of white men. Their ideology and thinking of themselves.
" The blinding of us " referring to the African American community. What I read in the poem is the freezing of progress in America of others. Namely Black Americans.
In the stanza " Praying the snowing it will stop, is referring to the oppressions and change we often pray for in our lives. You know we are some praying folks, always asking in prayer what we can't get here on earth. So let the white race stop falling on us like a blanket of snow, that cripples a city.
I liked the poem. I thought it causes the reader to open up to what he/she feels. This is what a good poem composition is about. Having more than one interpretation leaves growth for the reader and the writer to enjoy different aspects of a poem.
Like 1Poet, he saw snow, and Deepy saw this as a reference to weather...and snow as in cocaine. It is in the reader of poetry to interpret the meaning of the poem.
Everything looked
Pure and white
but the feeling went away
and with it did the colors
and true colors make a day
so what reason it gives to stay
In this I read that without all of the races of color. The world is a bland color globe, and every hue is significant to its existence. If we aren't welcome here, ( so what reason it gives to stay ) then why should we stay?
I think you are well on your way to dropping some great poems. Work on your expressions and getting the meaning clear and you will grow. We all are growing know that. Poetry isn't finished with us yet!
" I have to say that I wrote this for myself, meaning I didn't pay attention to the reader at all.
I just wrote down what came up in my mind."
I do this myself. So there is nothing wrong with this type of writing. It should convey the poets thoughts first, it will please many readers. As you write and are taking your a reader into consideration, do your best to not loose the feelings, content or meaning you want to convey doing so. Keep flowing.