Black Poetry : winter morns

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  1. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Winter morns’ greets the rain
    As it flows steadily outside my
    window and I rest amongst the
    serene to listen to nature’s ballet;

    Today’s rains is different for there
    is no accompaniment of wind to
    sway it left to right leaving a trail
    of past attempts to reach the gutter;

    The rains are quiet and yet when I
    close my eyes I can see the dance
    outside my window as I imagine
    my walk today without umbrella;

    I lose my peace inside the drops
    each one a memory of yesterday
    washed away by the conclusion
    of its journey from cloud to ground;

    A journey I’ve wandered many a day
    as life carried me through heartache
    and pain only to find comfort in the
    wisdom to release through subtle tears;

    Such a long travail from the reason the
    rains held in clouds above, carried over
    miles and miles until the day arrives when
    the weight of accumulation forces release;

    Can’t carry the rains for too long before
    the changing of seasons force the drops
    hidden in clouds to find a place to go only
    to learn their fate is in a downward path;

    I stretch my hand to capture the drops
    hoping to catch one in full form and see
    within only to discover that the rains within
    my fingers are the drops from my own eyes…
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There be days like that mama told us so
    Dnommo, swing lo :rain:
    Here comes the sun!


    :cook:
     
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    OOOOOOOOOOO

    This is so pretty! Flow on, flow on, this one is tight.
     
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    Although this piece described a sadness, there was such a beautiful ease in the description. Do flow on...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    how i felt the dripping warmth of brighter sunny days ahead
    tyte scribe my brutha in da meadows
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    always brighter days ahead...feeling this scribe deep
    peace
    Angel
     
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    it's funny how the whether can either control or reflect our thoughts and feelings

    sometimes when it rains
    and i see the raindrops fall, i feel like everything around me is falling. My joys my pain, my insecurities, everything, just gets soaked up by the ground, till i have nothing but my spirit and God is left in me. So i can appreciate the rain.
    but other times,
    when i see the raindrops fall
    it's like everything is falling on me, all my burdens are overwhelming me, crushing me.

    behind the rain is always the sun. Never fear, i was soaked in my own rainstorm, and thought that i couldn't make it through, but i did.
    im very impressed with this write, it was like painting a picture with words/
    keep the flow going
     
  8. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you all for your suppport
     
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    yo...this touched me...thas hard to do...great write
    one love
    khasm
     
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    Read it once, read it twice. Just HAD to respond.
    This was beautifully written and very very touching.
    Loved it.

    moham
     
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