Black Poetry : Windows

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by candeesweet, Nov 27, 2011.

  1. candeesweet

    candeesweet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As the words quietly drift down my windows.​
    The rings enable me to hear someone shout "sable"​
    Who's sable?​
    I'll be right bk one of my old trix.​
    Steadly we reembark & look again for the flix of truth​
    Which outrageous termoil of a drama/horror could be real​
    Yet love scenes seeming so fake​
    So we come bk. to it's All in the I of the beholder​
    So it's true after the swandler.​
    I think I may be liken to view some Rice otta my rite eye.​
    Not the other that got me viewing from only pale but brown w/ intricicies, pounding to be delicate or liqui fyed to go down pure but smooth.​
    Changing throughout lines trains and being on some planes​
    Let's the dribble look as if it's going somewhere but technically it's just gotten there.​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sweetly expressed
     
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    Sister Poet Candeesweet,

    Brilliant. This piece has a daring silkiness that feels cooling just beneath the skin.
    I particularly love:

    "I think I may be liken to view some Rice otta my rite eye.​
    Not the other that got me viewing from only pale but brown w/ intricicies, pounding to be delicate or liqui fyed to go down pure but smooth."​

    Truly feeling those lines, they're stylish, creative and go down smooth. Great piece. Thanks for sharing.​

    BTW, I sometimes pretend I don't get your work but I generally do.

    (smile)
     
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    @ $$RICH$$ glad you liked the expression!

    @TotalView my pleasure for sharing my creative side. Thanks for the attributes:)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    no doubt sis keep flowin sweetly
     
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    peace

    Peeking thru the window and enjoying the view....
     
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