Black Poetry : Whole 'Notha Level

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SwtT, Jan 30, 2004.

  1. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You & I are on aysymmetrical paths
    aimlessly wondering arouns,
    on our hands and knees
    Stuggling to find a piece of the world
    to call our own.
    Knowing, yet not understanding
    Why I can't have you
    And why you can't have me
    But it's such an uncomplicated mystery..

    You see,
    I'm in a world where college is required and
    getting a job is optional until a later time
    Yet you are in a rhythmic world
    where music & dreams must be
    brought.
    Not required or optional.
    It just is.

    Giving your heart to someone seems so out-of-fashion these days
    But you tell me giving you my goldmine is popular?
    Not wonder you're so....rich with experience

    My world and yours would call us
    ill-fated lovers
    If I had met you in another time
    ..I might have adored you

    But how can I raise a family
    when I'm not even old enough to drink?

    Baby, we are on different levels

    No need for you to ask whose on the lower one
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa, sister, that last line slayed me! you know why I liked this, is because your voice is so very strong. wow, girl, you have come so far. your confidence shines like morning dew on the grass in summertime. great to read you again, too. :)
     
  3. Khasm13

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    goodness....
    this is similar to what i was going thru
    at your age...
    knowing someone that had no intentions
    of getting a higher education...wanting to
    get things started...tyte scribe sis...i feel you on this joint
    one love
    khasm
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tell it lil' sister...
    you know when he's not in your league...
    ain't no half stepping
    or settling for less going down here...
    ^5
     
  5. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks fam, I am trying to get off my booty and start writing again because as we all know, writing is the best medicine there is:)
    :grouphug: thanks gempis, khasm,and angelicsage...your comments mean the world to me
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SwtT,
    i enjoyed your write--interesting situation and perspective.

    Peace and Blessings,
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes it's a new wave fo sho
    let it be heard and known sis...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Go for what you know, go for that goal, flow on with this.
     
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    oh, this was so tyte.....it spoke of truth....and I had the same kind of relationship as you......and I find this poem to be a stright reality check....much love for this SwtT
     
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    Girl at 18 years of age you have learned what some 40 year olds haven't.
    If you practice this youwill continue to be ahead of the game.
     
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