Black Poetry : who were you?

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  1. Birddgurl2

    Birddgurl2 Member MEMBER

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    8 years ago i seen you for the first time
    i almost died at the deepest end of the water
    it was like you was a real person
    you got behind me and push me up to the surface
    i seen your face and i felt safe
    when i got out of the water
    i turned around and you was not there
    could it be that you were
    my angel
    my angel here to save me from leaving the earth
    who were you
    most people say that angels
    cometh when you are really in life or death situations
    could it be that you are
    my angel?
    this is one of my questions that i have held on to
    for years
    please answer me, i need to know
    who do i thank?

    my mother always tell me to
    be nice to everyone, especially to the people that
    you have just met,
    because you never know they could be your
    angel...
     
  2. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love this, girl. did this really happen to you? And yes, you can learn from absolutely everyone - and should if you're paying attention. Nice scribe.
     
  3. Mawelulu1Luv

    Mawelulu1Luv Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A touching heartfelt piece...

    I hope U find your Angel...

    Write On!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well done felt every line
    continue
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a nice poem
    release in the flow
    much love
    Peace
    Blue :heart:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow...
    very nice posed so well...
    fely every line
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Stranger things have happened...I'd like to think we all have someone watching over us...nice piece.
     
  8. Birddgurl2

    Birddgurl2 Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love again
    yes this really did happen to me
    i knew i couldn't swim but i tried to show off
    and went down a water slide didn't know how
    deep it was and i almost died
    but didn't because of my angel
    true story.
     
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    it was a true blessing
    peace
     
  10. LeRoy

    LeRoy Active Member MEMBER

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    im feelin this poem

    thats some real talk

    keep writing and i'll keep reading
     
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