Black Poetry : Who was she really>??..new one

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LURK, Nov 25, 2005.

  1. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Sep 12, 2002
    Messages:
    875
    Likes Received:
    10
    Occupation:
    Recording artist and Business Man...so lets do it
    Location:
    Shaolin,New York
    Ratings:
    +10
    she was standing on the median
    traffic surrounded.....
    Black dress,filled with her curves
    all around it....
    she was crying,tears tainting the cheeks of a beauty
    i only had a chance to glance...
    but its been 2 weeks since she moved me....
    i've had her image in my head ever since its been said,
    She was the Angel Of Death,
    a dark figure
    may be more,she may be less.....
    but for me,>>the only thing i conjure up gets me stressed...
    who was she really?
    the thought alone is too complex....
    I'm a humble man of wisdom,
    but a fool at best...
    Head screwed on a lil loose
    but all true with the rest....
    its only a mile back at the destruction site,
    leaping a few steps...
    she wasnt there this time,
    was all just a test?
    to get me hype?........scared
    like im losing my life?
    i couldnt dare
    im broke and that was set at high price....
    so its no joke,
    im prone to staring at lies...
    i'm gonna shut my ears closed
    and cover my eyes.............................................................................



    make it as you want it to be
     
  2. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Nov 2, 2005
    Messages:
    2,088
    Likes Received:
    38
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    Full Time Student and Independant Buisness Owner
    Location:
    Life is waiting....
    Ratings:
    +38
    IM FEELIN THESE .........2 HOT 1Z IN 1 IM REALLY FEELIN IT!!!!!!

    WHO R U TO ME
    WHUT HAVE U DONE 4 P
    IVE BEEN DOWN THA ROAD N BAC
    I DONT NEED UR SLACK
    UR WORDZ CANT HURT ME
    UR HATIN WONT PHASE THEE
    UR NOT ON MA LEVEL
    UR BOUT AZ IMPORTANT AZ THA DEVIL
    SO
    IM MOVIN ON
    WHILE U WAIT TA HEAR MA SONG
    IMA KEEP IT REAL
    SOMTHIN UD NEVA FEEL

    I DUNNO JUS GAVE A LIL SUMTHIN
    IM REALLY FEELIN URZ PA
     
  3. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Nov 2, 2005
    Messages:
    2,088
    Likes Received:
    38
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    Full Time Student and Independant Buisness Owner
    Location:
    Life is waiting....
    Ratings:
    +38
    OKAY THAT WUZ WEIRD CUZ IT WUZ JUS 2 IN THIS THREAD!!!!! LOL I REALLY WROTE THAT TO JUSTIFY ME THUG
    LOL
    WELL ILL POST IT IN THAT 1 LOL THAS WEIRD
     
  4. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Sep 12, 2002
    Messages:
    875
    Likes Received:
    10
    Occupation:
    Recording artist and Business Man...so lets do it
    Location:
    Shaolin,New York
    Ratings:
    +10
    lol yea i messed up boo...my baddddddd

    i was diggin that tho...chea!
     
  5. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Nov 2, 2005
    Messages:
    2,088
    Likes Received:
    38
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    Full Time Student and Independant Buisness Owner
    Location:
    Life is waiting....
    Ratings:
    +38
    LOL THANX LOL
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Was she real? Was she a metaphor? Perhaps an illusion? I liked the way you brought this, whatever way the reader sees it, it still flows just as well.
     
  7. spicybrown

    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 21, 2005
    Messages:
    4,201
    Likes Received:
    118
    Ratings:
    +118
    Angel Of...............

    Let your wisdom guide you,

    put those worries beside you,

    standing amongst confusion, I'm draped in triple darkness,

    overjoyed, my soul adrift, while pausing amidst this love quest,

    from another realm of reality, I have descended to bring you death,

    death of crushed memories,

    life of sheer ecstacy,

    come go with me, i'll revive your essence with yet another fresh breath,

    My omnipresence sending shivers up&down your spine,

    you're looking fine as ever......since last time,

    I told you: "I'll see you next lifetime", and I wasn't lying,

    this time I'll make a vow to treasure you like an uncut diamond,

    This here love rapture takes me back several years,

    when we painted the ivory shores with footprints, forgetting all our fears,

    you barely recognize me, thought I painted your memory so bright,

    hush my love, follow my lead, let's promenade through the night,

    into the twilight, let the stars guide our path,

    resting under heavenly dew sprinkles, wishing we can make it last,

    lift my body, safely into your arms,

    protect me from the rain,

    protect me from any harm,

    before I vanish, bless me with one last kiss...just one more,

    for my mission is deemed "incomplete", next lifetime I'll settle the score.





    :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar: :smooch: :spinstar: :spinstar: :angel1: :spinstar: :spinstar: :smooch: :spinstar: :spinstar: :spinstar:
     
  8. NubianWoman

    NubianWoman Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Nov 25, 2005
    Messages:
    14
    Likes Received:
    1
    Ratings:
    +1
    this is so interesting...a woman in tears standing on the median. Could it be taboo? it is a suspense, filled with fear, and thrills of the unknown.Somewhere in the middle of traffic.I enjoyed your poem :)