Poetry Critiques : WHO KNOWS BUT THE GOD WHO KNOWS?

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  1. One9_Arch

    One9_Arch Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Salaam Family, Here's another poem submitted for you to critique:

    If you could see through the Eyes of God
    While maintaining your own Perception of Reality
    What would you see?

    Anyone so blind to the reality of the Time
    As to believe in what they can’t see
    Or dispute what We can’t do.

    Too foolish for the Labor of Truth
    Hard life ... No luck
    And so the Youth thinks, “why give a f...?”

    Fourteen generations tougher.
    Gott’em fearful of Our Energy
    The Black God rougher than they want’cha to think.

    Too aggressive when We Speak.
    “There’s no one bad enough to f... with me!”
    Quick to clique-up with a clique of nig..’s, “f... the police!”

    If you could project yourself into the Future
    While occupying space in the infinite present
    Where would you Be?

    If Reality isn’t what Is
    But instead, “What We think is real”
    A threat perceived is a threat with which We must deal.

    To be a king is to first think
    Above and beyond the Wildest dreams;
    Of any and all whom you may Perceive
    To be a threat to that which your people needs.

    To be a man is to recognize
    The sovereignty of a godly mind
    To understand truths so long forgotten
    Six millenniums old ... A Vacuum in Time.

    To bring Allah to Remembrance
    Remembering Self!
    Take a look through your own eyes
    Realize your own rise.

    See yourself however you will
    But understand that your Worth lies...
    In the Depths of your own mind.

    And for real ...
    The only gift We’ve really got to give
    Is a better Reality or way to live.

    If you could see through the Eyes of God
    Would all be chaos or total control?
    Would you smile at the latest styles
    Or frown on a person’s clothes?​

    Who knows but the God who Knows?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well done keep doing it like tis here
     
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    I liked it

    Nice flow and seems to address some REAL and power~filled issues which WE struggle with.

    Seems realy philosophical as well...and that's a BlacK thing...cause it makes one THINK!!! and address some extemely complex issues..

    Thanks for shaing..
     
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    so true this piece was pure and on it ....don't change a thing
     
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