Black Poetry : white boy in mitsubishi

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Jan 18, 2004.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    darkness has a hold
    i see a white boy doin' 80 mph
    on my ***
    silver mitsubishi
    in my rear view mirror
    oxford and tie
    white boy...listening to nickleback
    needs to slow down
    i put on my brake lights
    slow down white boy
    you won't be hitting me
    from behind
    literally or figuratively
    he slams brakes
    ice patch
    concrete barrier
    180 degree turn
    now facing oncoming traffic
    turnpike
    mitsubishi torn apart
    haze of snow
    ice
    metal
    smoke and glass
    he aiight tho
    i see the destruction and i keep going
    cause i can't be late for work
    darkness has a hold of me
    i wasn't even shook
    he'll get another mitsubishi
    next time
    he might get a blue one
     
  2. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really enjoy the last sentence in your piece. sista you are off the chain...good write.
     
  3. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    " you won't be hitting me
    cause i can't be late for work "

    Very nice.. Got to get to work.

    Redlady .. I enjoyed the read.

    Take the fifth.. on any inquirys.
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Guess that j o b has to take precedence sometime...liked this descriptive piece.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow, this is kinda fun, kinda unexpected. made me want more
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    smooth drop dis was nice love it
     
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    realrawism Active Member MEMBER

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    You have great range with your topics. Nice!
     
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    i like this flow...that dude was acting a fool and you had to get to work..no time for the foolish..
    nice one
    Peace
    Blue :heart:
     
  9. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for replying to this piece!
     
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    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    teeth

    haaahaaa! Yo that was good, yo.! Real tite. I wanna read it again 2morrow...
     
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