Black Poetry : Whispers

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by arthur1210, Aug 25, 2004.

  1. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Nov 6, 2003
    Messages:
    223
    Likes Received:
    5
    Occupation:
    Student/Sales
    Location:
    FLA
    Ratings:
    +5
    She gave you a phone number
    She seemed eager for your call
    She says "a dub for a dance
    Or, with a yard you can touch and all"
    Wearing the shortest shorts to tease you
    Making you want to see them fall
    So sexy and so accessible
    Breaking all sorts of laws

    So you dialed her number
    Caught her voice sounding so sweet
    Then, with little hesitation
    Explained to her all your needs
    Indulgence, banging the cage
    And, you're going to set him free
    Expectations start to swell
    Thinking of what should be achieved


    She says, "let's make this happen"
    Just the words you needed to here
    She sees papers and gets naked
    You hold's them up and she comes near
    She shows no reservation
    You see she has no fear
    She tells you how she'll earn it
    Whispers it in your ear
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 30, 2003
    Messages:
    5,322
    Likes Received:
    38
    Location:
    ~The hidden library...~
    Ratings:
    +39
    mmm...I see someone
    is trying to start a fire
    up in here...

    cause this piece is smokin :smokin:

    Great imagery,anticipation and creativity...
    the whisper is always a mysterious
    interlude into the imagination...

    Nice work poet!
     
  3. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Apr 5, 2004
    Messages:
    905
    Likes Received:
    9
    Occupation:
    administrative
    Location:
    Bowie
    Ratings:
    +9
    Ooooh tell me more, tell me more....

    I like this
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Aug 26, 2003
    Messages:
    12,660
    Likes Received:
    191
    Location:
    somewhere ova da rainbow....
    Ratings:
    +219
    this was very nice...i enjoyed it wish it was more
    Peace
    Angel
     
  5. Poeticsoulsista

    Poeticsoulsista Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Apr 7, 2003
    Messages:
    254
    Likes Received:
    8
    Gender:
    Female
    Ratings:
    +8
    I'll have to agree with rich. Great imagery. I got a full picture in my head when I was reading your peice. It captured my mind and took it on a little ride. Thanks.

    Poetic Sista
     
  6. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Mar 17, 2003
    Messages:
    515
    Likes Received:
    8
    Occupation:
    17, 11th grade at GPHS
    Location:
    Houston, Texas
    Ratings:
    +8
    well???????????????what happened next? you can't leave a sistah on the edge of her seat like that! come pull me back up, make a part II or something, you done started something good..............bring that scribe back you're on :flame:
     
  7. hiphop4ever

    hiphop4ever Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jul 20, 2003
    Messages:
    42
    Likes Received:
    0
    Ratings:
    +0
    Datz how they roll playa
    Backbreakin!
    Aint nuttin like it

    D*%# this was fiyah
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Yea, I'm with lilcherry, and then what happened? Inquiring minds want to know. Must be a good poem to peak our interests this way.
     
  9. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 5, 2003
    Messages:
    4,020
    Likes Received:
    32
    Occupation:
    strength coach
    Location:
    Seattle, WA
    Ratings:
    +32
    my goodness, so tight, so tight. but yes, brothah, drop us another verse. this is too hot to drop. :smokin:
     
  10. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Nov 6, 2003
    Messages:
    223
    Likes Received:
    5
    Occupation:
    Student/Sales
    Location:
    FLA
    Ratings:
    +5
    Wow, thanks for all the love, I really appreciate it

    Of course, there is more to the story...
    I was trying to let your imaginations run
    (and not tell all my business)
    but, I will enlighten everyone soon

    just keep your eyes open
     
Loading...
Similar Threads - Whispers
  1. Liberty
    Replies:
    6
    Views:
    498
  2. cherryblossom
    Replies:
    3
    Views:
    523
  3. Ankhur
    Replies:
    1
    Views:
    430
  4. MsInterpret
    Replies:
    0
    Views:
    272
  5. info-moetry
    Replies:
    0
    Views:
    747