Black Poetry : while you were sleeping

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, May 3, 2003.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i looked upon your face
    while you were sleeping
    i traced the outline of your lips
    and with my finger tip
    i felt the familiar contours of your face
    and i sighed
    what am i gonna do with you
    how am i going to make you see
    that i can take on this world
    if you will only love me

    i long to sit on your lap
    and kiss your lips
    and let it flow until i move my hips
    i want to moan and i want to cry
    i want you to take me someplace high
    and someplace far and far away

    and when we return
    i want you to say...that was good girl
    i can't get enough
    but that's just a fantasy
    that i conjoured up
    while you are sleeping
    because the reality is so barren
    while you are awake
     
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    amberly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sometimes fantasies are all we have, when reality hits, its no joke, Im feeling your words here , nicely written
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes indeed Amberly said it so well to sum it up !
    nice flow RED
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    redlady

    Very nice...it put me in the moment.

    I too fantasied of having someone...but they weren't asleep. Hell, they weren't even at the house. :lol:

    You must drop this piece in voice chat.

    :thanks: for sharing.
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol Monetary same herre I really like this I fine myself doing the same thing while he is sleeping.... newayz peace and blessins keep flowin :) oh yeah beautiful poem. :):):):)
     
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