Black Poetry : While You Were Sleeping

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  1. midnightsson

    midnightsson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Quiet, calm, tranquility...settling down over you like a blanket,
    can you feel the peace?
    Strong arms wrapped tightly around you guarantees anything getting to you,
    must first get through me
    the arms are attached to a strong body, slim and lean but solid
    that body houses a mind, and a heart that beats to the rhythm of your breathing
    a brain that incessantly thinks of ways to show, what the heart is feeling
    As you sleep, I look down at you and can’t stop the rush of emotion that rips through me
    my body shudders from the force of raw attraction...I hope I don’t wake you.
    I resist a crazy impulse to softly kiss your eyelids, and just continue to stare at you
    Your scent gently permeates my nostrils and I inhale deeply,
    capturing your aroma and storing the smell in my memory
    for the moment, I’m alone with you on a whole different plane of existence
    no stress, no worries, no negative thoughts
    You being in my life has re-awakened the feelings I so long to extinguish...
    hope, trust, love, friendship, completeness
    When things get bad and I’m at my lowest, just ONE thought of you Jen..
    Brings me to the pinnacle of happiness
    no, no..not just happiness...total contentment
    I think of all these things, as my eyes trace the smooth contours of your face
    imagining your eyelids opening, and turning night into day with your 2 sparkling gems
    It’s like someone captured the brilliance of an exploding supernova..and put it into your eyes
    As I think of the night we shared, I flush with heat...
    reminiscing of my tongue outlining the soft curves of your body
    our bodies fit together like links on a bicycle chain,
    but the real connection is the mental bond we have made
    you know my likes and I know yours
    we can read each others facial expressions and finish each others thoughts.

    As dawn begins its battle with darkness, I’m reminded of us
    I am midnyght, cold, dark, and mysterious
    you are dawn..bright, full of hope and positivity, and illuminating the world
    I used to fear light, and commitment..what if you lose your feelings for the other?
    But I think I see now how marriages last forever...
    When you feel true feelings for someone...every day with them feels new.
    I could never tire of waking up to you.
    It’s perplexing my mind the way we connect like cursive letters
    finding someone who can match your effort and feeling..nothing can feel better
    I want you as queen, my angel, for our relationship to be official
    uh oh..you’re awake now...wondering why I just passionately kissed you.

    Derrick H.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed da love is sho nuff with u
    tyght vibe
    u need to come opva to da poetry chat and bust da mic on dis
     
  3. StarGoddess

    StarGoddess Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mm mm mmmmmm

    this prose was beautiful and heartfelt.....

    it is easy to see how much you love her suga....

    just lovely.....


    **floating**
    :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss:
     
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    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I want sombody to Luv me like that :(
    BUt on the real , this was tyte. Big Up
     
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    beautiful piece.
    I hope she knows how much you love her.
    Lovin your choice of words:
    Your scent gently permeates my nostrils and I inhale deeply,
    capturing your aroma and storing the smell in my memory

    Very nice.

    *Emma*
     
  6. midnightsson

    midnightsson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i want to individually thank you all for your wonderful words....doesnt love make you act crazy? lol
     
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    ladye Active Member MEMBER

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    aww, how tweet
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is love at it's finest. Well written poet.
     
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