Black Poetry : While you are gone

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  1. quest

    quest Active Member MEMBER

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    sup fam if you all have ever lost (not death but love) something or someone important to you then you will feel this. i wanted to share something fresh off my mind with yall.

    -while you are gone-

    while you walk away and think of the decision you made
    is the really right?
    Why do i feel like i've just been played
    why can't i move on?
    why am i acting so strange?
    do i really miss you?
    or am i just afraid of change?
    but while you walk away
    your back will be the last memory in my mind
    to forever remind me where i stand in your life
    so i ask again...
    is this really right?

    while you walk away and leave the presence of cold winds
    freezing my heart killin me within hoping your breath
    will warm the winds
    that flow through the veins of my spirit
    reviving them with the pulse of joy
    or is all that caused from a thought of--
    what we were.

    quest ( ache el ) :crying:
     
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    quest Active Member MEMBER

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    where's the love?

    sup people...what's up with the feed back i want to know what you all think.

    quest ( ache el )
    greatmindsgreatworkgreatpeoplegreatpoetry
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    quest

    minds wanna know da answer to it all
    look deep within self and know from ya
    heart coz .......dis be reality thoughts
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i didn't want to say this, but..

    i have this joynt i may post called "let her go"...
     
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    Rich

    appreciate the feedback cuz it be real in the field.
    love is serious.

    quest ( ache el )
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    quest Active Member MEMBER

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    j'hiah

    i'm already smiling because i know its going to be good, i'm interested in knowing what your piece has to offer for the brain...thanks for the repley.

    quest ( ache el )
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