Black Poetry : While Combing her Natural Hair

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    She took the hair band
    out of her natural hair
    got a wide toothed comb, and gingerly
    began combing it through with care
    Working from the bottom of her hair
    to the scalp, combing the tangles out
    Takes a bit of time to do, but her hair just feels
    so much better natural, without a doubt

    All of a sudden, she feels another pair of hands
    So, it takes a bit more time, he remarks
    She laughs, not realizing
    she had said that remark out loud
    Easing the comb out of her hands, he adds
    Having a woman with natural hair makes me proud

    He continues...
    Seeing your hair makes me think of an African queen
    sauntering down the banks of the Nile
    Walking with self assured steps, and her head held
    high, her regal bearing, always in style
    She walks arm in arm with her king
    Cherishing her as the precious jewel that she is
    He pauses and kisses her tenderly
    so proud that this queen is his
    Perhaps as proud as I am
    that you are my queen
    Just wanted to remind you of
    what you truly mean

    He lays the comb down, and she
    pulls her hair back like before
    She tells him she couldn't possibly
    love and adore a man any more
    After a long lingering kiss
    they nestle and fall asleep serenely
    Dreaming of walking along the Nile
    King and Queen for an eternity
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Here's something that I know to be a fact: when a man runs his hands through "Natural Hair" ...it gives them a calmness of the Universe, the closeness of Us. When giving birth, everything dies but 1 strand of (natural) hair.
    Beautiful piece that all Kings can surely relate :sand: too.
     
  3. Keita Kenyatta

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    Tried to sneak this one pass me, huh?! To keep it real I thought you was writing about me until you got to the falling asleep part....lol This is a great piece...almost sounded like book material Sis ! Give that a thought. Thanx for the work cause it's only NATURAL!!!!
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    wow

    very beautiful ending

    i see you respect the respect when the respect is due and then respect the respect with all due respect

    feel me?

    lol

    nice piece poet

    5 stars
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gee, queent, that was absolutely beautiful. Only thing else I can say is, thanks a million sis.
    So, you thought I was talking about you until the falling asleep part, keita? You're a mess. But like your wife, you humble me. Thank you so much.
    I wanted the ending to give a feeling of serenity, thank you kindly for your response So'ja. Yes I feel ya, lol.
     
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    speechless

    beautiful scene, queen goddess diva lady wife mother sister aunt netert
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you could see this scene applied to all queens, Sha'iyn. Thank you so much, poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well done sis almost missed this one
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Rich, much appreciated.
     
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    The imagery in this is fabulous! This scene is so palpable in its softness and so powerful in its message!
     
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