Black Poetry : Where You Are

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Tenorazel, Dec 28, 2009.

  1. Tenorazel

    Tenorazel Member MEMBER

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    My mind is all over the place
    like a hammer taken to the glass of a window pain,
    Tiny pieces skattered randomly.
    Got this veil over my eyes so thick I cannot see,
    Help me get it back now, can't do it all alone.
    To many little pieces, blindly constructing pieces,
    Bits and little pieces, cutting myself on pieces,
    yelling through the veil. D***, this hurts like hell!
    Yelling out and yelling out but no one comes to save.
    I sit hands red from the skattered pieces, mind broken from the skattered pieces, faith a token to the skattered pieces.
    The throne wont help with the pieces only with the veil.
    The veil comes down, the lights come on, and yes, you're still in hell. ​

    :em0200:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling all of this as i relate to the many pieces skattered
     
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    as we do go through the pain we heal as well...I liked this poem
     
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    This was a poignant read. Figuratively, metaphorically, these "pieces" could reflect so much.

    As I read it, though, it felt like someone who is unsure, in doubt, searching for something.

    It appears that it's directed towards someone, though. :thinking:

    This was a very creative poetic expression of your perception of whoever that "YOU" person is.

    Now, for that person, there may not be any "pieces." :10500:
    There may not be any "veil."---Perhaps, he or she sees very clearly. [​IMG]
    And perhaps, he or she is contented in that "faith" in the "Throne."

    Well, these are just my own observations; but you expressed this very well! :toast:

    And I hope whoever that "YOU" person is appreciates and enjoys this piece as much I did! :bowdown:




     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This hit home very poignaintly. You scribe this feeling down to the last T. :welldone:
     
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