Black Poetry : Where will you stand?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by greggy, Jul 19, 2004.

  1. greggy

    greggy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Family...
    although I am primarily a graphic artist more so than a verbal poet I do like to have wordplay when the mood strikes...I originally posted this on my website a few weeks ago and hope my family will enjoy it here!


    WHERE WILL YOU STAND?

    Where will you stand brotherman?
    when they write your name in sand
    on marble steps in a foreign land
    weeping mommas trying to understand
    the token telephone calls he was a good soldier
    a fine young man a patriot coming of age
    not ready to rage against the tyranny of it all
    taking the fall for some fool on The Mall
    unable to stall the eventual fall from grace
    of an empty space that could never be erased
    it still unbelievable just how much of a waste
    a fools nightmare has cost the human race
    at the end of time
    Where will you stand?

    Where will you stand sistahgirl?
    when they open the door to Babylon
    and beckon with promises of the world
    the very earth beneath your feet will be as gold
    getting old yet still the lies that are left untold
    will swallow your dreams and let your life unfold
    as a plastic beauty pretty as hell yet empty as a shell
    you have no time to be real it'll kill your sex appeal
    reaching for crumbling dreams of being a fools Queen
    a prize in disguise in the window of lies
    if only for the night
    Where will you stand?

    greggy
     
  2. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you mind showing me some of your graphic art,because if it's better than this I know it's off the hook.Very nice scribe and I think that you got it goin on in the verbal world:wink::wave:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    look like a great poet to me , u really drop dis on hit
    love the message in the flow and how it speak to ya mind
    tyte brutha
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thought provoking piece here. Where will you stand, when it all comes down to it. I like poetry that makes me think about an issue presented. Keep writing down what comes to you when the mood strikes.
     
  5. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alright pa. So your a Graphic Artist huhn? Seems like you're a poet to me! I'm diggin your fresh fire! Keep breathing it!
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There's much to be said about this...Where would I be? wow *smh*
    wonderful, wonderful piece, I felt it and I'm hearing you.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You droppin confetti of truth up in here. I think you a poet too. Flow on, flow on, this is so good.
     
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    Awesome and
    very thought provoking
    write...
    As an artist, poetry comes easy :spinstar:
    Thanks for sharing this with us...
    I enjoyed it immensly!
     
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    yo....ima be standing with my foot on the neck of the beast...
    i enjoyed this poem from both sides...keep scribe'n my man...
    also...my brother, thank you so much for contributing to destee.com
    you'll see, if you already havent, that this place is all love...welcome
    one love
    khasm
     
  10. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Looks like, smells like, reads like poetry to me! Welcome, Greggy :shades:
     
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