Black Poetry : Where I want to be........!

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  1. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A lover's confessions
    A lover's confessions
    Never wanted you for no possesion
    Just your
    L.O.V.E
    You showed me love like no other
    You lended your shoulder when I needed it
    You made me believe that love was possible for a girl who long to be
    L.O.V.E.D
    So tell me love why am I writing this open confessing
    Wanting to end this relationship of
    Hopelessness
    Infidelity
    Despair
    Heartbroken
    I stand before you all juror to tell I have no proof of my claims
    Never caught him cheating, but I caught him in my lies
    He offered me despair then turn around and wipe my tears with his love
    He had given me hopelessness, and then in a wink presented me with a dozen roses
    He left me heartbroken many times then cooked me dinner to mend these broken
    P.I.E.C.E.S.
    I no longer want you to hold me, nor love me
    Because I don't feel the same
    Always the rain
    Always the rain
    You wanted to give me your last name
    It ain't the same
    It ain't the same
    It ain't the same
    I wonder if you feel the same way
    I wishing that day
    will come soon
    I feel noon
    I will tell the one I no longer love the way I feel
    I feel the words I say will be the truth
    As I can hear you say
    "Let me hear you say you don't love me!"
    Hands sweating, leg wagging, fidgeting
    Opening my mouth to say
    Here is where I want to be.................

    to be continued..........


    Lavette112/Nevar112​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awe wow gurl just where you wanna be ......If i can get there from this road
    i'm on i'll be happy ....ya pen talking like indingo drums
     
  3. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a great read Sister.

    None of these you want to be.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Very poignant piece.
    The torn emotions drip from the page,
    With undercurrents of turmoiled hope and simmering rage.
    The reader can't help but empathize.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We put so much of our hopes and dreams into relationships, it's difficult to say goodbye, even when we know down deep it would be for the best. Well expressed piece.
     
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    It is definitely a passionate piece. Its been a while since I've read a poem so sincere and open......... Well Done!
     
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    Hello Nevar...

    Sometimes where we want to be is where we shouldn't be, but being caught up in what we believe is love keeps us from realizing. Nice to read you again.:)


    Feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
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