Black Poetry : Where dreams may lead

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  1. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    he said in dreams
    he could be anything
    but he was chasing
    his dreams in all
    the wrong places
    marijuana induced hallucinations
    produced in him
    a desperation
    to find a better place to be

    he looked at the world
    through glassy eyes
    that never quite
    focused on anything
    mistakenly thinking
    he could handle "it"

    when he started
    using speed as a one way ticket
    to utopia
    looking for paradise
    in a little pill
    he thought he was still
    in control

    so he made an unconscious decision
    to rise to a higher level of dreaming
    chasing a stream of white powder
    across a polished surface
    on a daily basis
    going to places only he could go
    but the return trip
    wasn't quite the same
    nor was the pain that came
    with it

    pain that lasted for too long
    until his body got tired
    from the wear and tear
    of so many journeys
    so he took a different route
    shooting up among the stars
    and his dreams changed
    rearranged themselves into nightmares
    and the winged demons came to call
    utopia/paradise disappeared
    replaced by fears
    crawling through his mind
    in the night hours
    sending him to the edge of sanity
    confusing his thought process

    until reality didn't exist
    and he lived in a misty world
    of twisted dreams and silent screams
    and his only way out
    was to fly with the demons
    on wings of broken dreams
    screaming screaming screaming
    until he reached his utopia
    a place of forever dreaming
    now he sleeps
    peacefully

    (c) nfn 2002
     
  2. elayne.

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    kt.


    dayum gyrl! :) it's wonderful to read you again!
    & as usual... you still possess the ability to draw
    the reader into every word you scribe. this was
    an intense ride, chile!! thank you for sharing...
    once more!! don't stay gone so long next time!

    itsallLove.

    elayne.
     
  3. Shani

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    I'm really surprised to find only one comment on this deep peice. Well written, plus everything that Elayne said...

    ~Shani
     
  4. DIIMOND

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    This was a well thought important poem my friend...
    If u use drugs.. it will be the end...
    May those who read this, praise this!!!!
    Wonderful scribe and this was conciously correct and on time K...
    keep the flow coming on strong!!!
     
  5. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    kitana, this is one of the master pieces!
    do yo thang, girl.
    this piece really drew me in...
    thank you!
    -7:spinstar:
     
  6. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kitana!!!
    I'm at a loss for words....

    Your work is soul mind blowing.

    Come home more often. :)

    Coco :heart:
     
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    girl I love this...Where you been?
     
  8. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It is

    sooo wonderful to read you again Kitana Kitana! And this... is...exquisite, to the very last lines!



    alyce
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!!! dat why we miss u so much so glad to read u again
    dis was di-no-mite ! loved every line
     
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    brought tears to my eyes...
     
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