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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thespokesman, Aug 19, 2003.

  1. thespokesman

    thespokesman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ive been away
    ive been dealing with some emotional stuff and i always read this poem for inspiration

    from the heart thru the dome

    When

    When I put my head down
    Down low, my smiles erect from frowns
    I feel as if I’m closer to your grace
    I wanna kiss you but you have my face
    I let out my hand
    I can feel you when you laid your hands on that man
    Knowing I can’t touch you but I feel your touch
    Light reflects off the tears, I love you much

    When I put my head down, a voice spoke to me
    On a piece of paper in my mind you wrote to me
    Speak to me, I don’t know what to do
    You told me there is no limit to what I can do
    I lay in a bed of nails with no marks like skids on concrete
    I touched a rose with my hand and welts formed on my feet
    Do you understand me, why do you continue to fall beneath?
    There is nothing to fear, my love is in your speech

    When I put my head down, a young boy starred at me
    I could see his feelings swirl thru my mind like nightmares to me
    Building his future with your ill- mannered ways
    I told you I would be with you to the last of your days
    In many forms you came to me, like water that leaked from your car
    The vapor that leaked your dream from a falling star
    In the event all I could do was scream
    The reality I see is a result of dreams

    When I put my head down, I wanted to stop
    An uncontrollable force lifted my face when I started to drop
    Tears streamed down, I couldn’t let go
    If you ask I’ll speak your dreams out the 4
    I was there for you when you was ashamed
    I taught you to move on when you’ve been retained
    Remember all that I’ve done let this be your words
    Nobody understood what you meant in your slurs

    When I put my head down, I saw life spinning
    I wrote when, and cried from the beginning
    I can only speak for myself, just listen to words that I say
    I only saved this for you in case I never see the day
    If I left any belongings when I left the room
    This is the message impregnated in my womb
    There is nothing that can be done to me
    When I let the spokes spin, they spin eternally
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lovely
    is this from your book?
    it is wonderful
    very nice
    Peace
     
  3. thespokesman

    thespokesman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes it is
    its the second or third poem
    thank you for your reply

    im going to send this one to a publisher
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    This is beautiful...onpoint. We are never alone.

    Sweet inspiration.

    You should come to voice chat and read this. We'd love to hear it.

    Thanks for sharing.

    :toast: :D