Black Poetry : When You're Not Here With Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GQ, Dec 12, 2001.

  1. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's as if my world turned upside down
    when you stepped out of my existence

    Carefully you tip-toed across my psyche
    to burn within the nothingness that left
    me wanting to taste your chemistry ever
    so gently mixed with my own

    Wondering with fullest eyes wide open
    the reasons why I feel the way I do when...

    you're not here with me

    Spoken like a true lover's confessional,
    I laughed with you even though you
    really were not there; still I imagined
    that your distant feelings felt the very
    same need as my nearest mental passion

    Imagination never hurts; although it
    remains an unfulfilling substitute for
    warmth and sincerity and personal you

    When the want is deep and the need
    for touch is oh so real to my heart...

    you seem to never be here with me

    I ached for you through the night as I
    wrapped my arms around your spirit and
    kissed you with the lips of my dreams...

    soulfully--just the way you like it

    Awakened from a fantasized vision,
    you hugged my aura-filled karma and
    softly stroked my essence to climatic
    real-time orgasmic joy; flowing just for me

    It was then that I realized

    you

    were

    there

    inside

    of

    me

    all

    along...

    (C)GQINC 2001
     
  2. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "I ached for you through the night as I
    wrapped my arms around your spirit and
    kissed you with the lips of my dreams... "

    This is powerful...
    excellent use of words

    the words of this poem painted
    a picture on the canvas of my mind

    Respect for your artistry
    NittyGrit
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautifully said GQ

    expressing self emotional mind of she
    loved how u vibe dis one :toast:
     
  4. poeticdelight

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    hmmm.. i'm impressed!

    excellent work!

    pd
     
  5. Mr marion

    Mr marion Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very real

    I think it's so beautiful when a peson can understand their true feelings and express them accordingly, GQ you always give us a flow straight from the heart

    and ever so real !!!!
     
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    GQ

    this is...

    Ohhhhhh soooo sweet!!!
    :heart: ;)
     
  7. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    gq-man, this piece of sweet melancholy love poetry is simply beautiful. you know, i always have of thing for this type of scribes. very well done, dear poet, as always. keep on scribin', as i continue to watch.
     
  8. MsDLite

    MsDLite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    and you said...

    "Carefully you tip-toed across my psyche
    to burn within the nothingness that left
    me wanting to taste your chemistry ever
    so gently mixed with my own"


    ain't it something when a love can leave a
    powerful impression within the psyche...

    beautiful piece~
     
  9. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gentleman of Quality

    I like this side of you. Although I enjoyed the entire flow, I liked this vese the most:

    "Carefully you tip-toed across my psyche
    to burn within the nothingness that left
    me wanting to taste your chemistry ever
    so gently mixed with my own"


    The two becoming one :)
     
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