Black Poetry : When You Take Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Jan 3, 2005.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When you take me
    as you do
    All I feel
    is the love in you
    laying against me
    like a cool cotton sheet
    every fiber eliciting blissful sighs
    each thread creating comfort, complete
    creating a soft drape of wonder
    drifting like feathers over my skin
    taking me so far within myself
    I've forgotten what dimension I'm in
    soothing clouds billowing down
    catching each joyful tear
    let those clouds release upon you
    a mystical shower of me my dear
    let each drop saturate every
    multi facet of your mind
    reminding you, once again, of this
    spiritual connection that's one of a kind
    For only God in heaven knows what forces
    it took to turn you and I into we
    the sheer beauty of that journey
    when you...take....me
     
  2. HealingU

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    Dynamic write lady ! Obviously you too know the force it took and expressed it so well, Write On !
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whewwwwwwww!!
    when u taken to a bliss
    of a love tenderness
    u feel the warmth & joy
    sweet kind smile & glow
    when u taken
    by his twist of love
    ya heart and soul kiss

    dis was hot and tyte
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I thank you so much for your kind words HealingU. Hope you're enjoying your stay.
    Yes, the many feelings of bliss that exist when he takes me. Thank you Rich for the flow in response. Glad you enjoyed.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed sista love the piece
     
  6. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa, girl. Now this is the kinda connection I strive for. What a beautiful image, a great write.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh...:read:
    ...Oooooh :read:
    ............Oooooooooooh :read:
    girl mmmmm sista gyrl whew...
    THIS was my favorite part hehehe made me feel like i was wrapped up in your words
    Your poetry is like a devilish delight so much comes out of it
    its like lyrical chocolate lol jes cant get enough :D Loved it sista :)
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is beautiful... nothing like love's journey and that's real

    jh.
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you're loving it Rich. Thank you again brotha.
    All that is good will come to you gempis. Your constant support is so appreciated.
    Your work also makes me want to return for more triniti, thank you. So, when are you going to pen another?
    Yes, the journey is something else j'hiah. Thank you for your kind words brotha poet.
     
  10. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    "the sheer beauty of that journey"...
    you said it yourself...the sheer beauty of the journey...and so nicely shared with us.....nice watz...nice