Black Poetry : when you love me this way

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Jul 24, 2002.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    every time i see you
    i want to wrap my arms around you
    and you let me
    barely touching me in return
    feel like i am starving for your love and affection
    been on a diet for too many years
    a drop of love here, a slice of affection there

    yesterday was no different
    you stayed home from work to relax and take a break
    told me that you didn’t care if I stayed or left
    because you were gonna sleep all day anyway
    hey, I went to work
    when I came home and lay with you, hugged you
    i barely received any affection in return
    my usual small dose of not enough

    the evening wore on until I was sleepy
    your snoring woke me up
    I went into the guest bedroom…
    because you snore so loudly, that I can’t sleep
    at 2:00 AM you came into the room with me
    said come back to bed baby
    I don’t want to be alone
    so I came back into the room with you
    and you held me all night long

    Is this the reason why I continue to stay
    Unpredictable
    when you will love me this way
     
  2. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feeling this one
     
  3. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!!!! I love poetry like this, where the characters inside, be they real or fiction, but there is this push and pull factor, when the other pulls away long enough, the other starts to push eventually...loving it! loving it!

    yeah baby!!!:toast: :) :) :)
     
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    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes i understand the depth of this scribe and the moment it holds dear. you have crafted well this one poet...
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Im in total agreement with D on this one hea...!

    I like
    Reas
     
  6. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for your feedback, I never know when I post on here how I am received...I appreciate the love that you have shown.
     
  7. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    redlady you can rest assured on this forum you'll find nothing but love and space to grow....

    lo'
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "...been on a diet for too many years"

    that was/is a heavy line I have lived that.

    This piece is marvelous.

    blak
     
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