Poetry Critiques : When You Lay Down

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by 1SensualBrotha, Jan 11, 2007.

  1. 1SensualBrotha

    1SensualBrotha Member MEMBER

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    When you lay down at night,
    And close your eyes,
    Can you feel the caress of my hands
    Against your inner thighs?
    Can you feel the tips of my fingers,
    As my lips slowly linger,
    To a place I like to call paradise?
    Now, I want you to feel my flickering tongue,
    Let me taste your juices as they coat my lungs.
    Go ahead baby, put your hands on my bald head,
    And show me how much of this you want to be fed.
    I can tell you like it by the sway in your hips.
    Can you tell I’m thirsty,
    By my slow, provocative sips?

    Now, I’m ready to come inside;
    Let me hold your legs open wide.
    Wrap them around and hold my body tight;
    Feel the force of my plunges,
    As I thrust with all my “might”.

    Get on top, and take me for a ride;
    Work your body back-and-forth, then go side-to-side.
    Yeah baby, release the intensity inside your soul;
    Feel the warm lava, as my hips continue to roll.
    Collapse on top of me, and I will hold you right there;
    Kiss me on my neck, while I play with your hair.
     
  2. spicybrown

    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Back to back erotic flows, eh? LMAO... now why are my feet feeling tingly after reading this:?:

    :)

    :picture:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Hot and smooth very well set and done
    no need to rework this bliss...........tyte
     
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