Black Poetry : When you find your in a situation

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  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When you find you are in a situation
    There seems nothing you can do

    The one who got you in this thing
    They quickly abandon you

    They use what they think
    They know about you

    The things they see you do
    They later use these misunderstanding and those things
    To criticize and use against you

    What the H*ll
    This thing it smells
    Like a set up
    A real let down

    I stand here looking around for friends
    Close at hand none can be found

    So I take the lumps
    The ridicule and bumps

    My faith is under attack

    The faith I had in other people
    The faith in myself in fact

    I will get thru this
    I know I will

    How badly I come out in the end

    I will access the damage
    Left like a hurricane wind
    Then build back in my life what I can

    They are out

    I am sorry

    I can’t let you back in

    You let me down when I needed you
    You acted like an enemy not a friend

    You crying
    What about me

    When I needed you

    No tears
    Now
    No tears now
    I don’t have the passion for you!

    I was dedicated to what we built

    I had fervor that fire
    Couldn’t you see it my actions
    It was before me
    In my eyes

    In my heart
    It has changed
    I don’t about you feel the same
    It is tragic and that is now the game

    You are going to try and convince me
    Really convince me

    You didn’t betray my trust

    I am going to listen

    Listen I am about to say something
    I know you know

    Your story sounds believable
    But, you I can no longer trust
    Never trust you

    No more

    So I am planning on leaving
    I am looking at the plan

    I am stepping on with my life
    You can do now
    What ever you want

    It’s true we talk
    No one listens
    So the words go over our heads

    I hear you
    I don’t
    You hear me
    This relationship it is dead

    It failed us many years ago
    I have stuck around
    For a reason

    Now the reason is fulfilled
    The strength in me is real

    To complete this
    To help me to heal
    I need to leave

    I will be working
    On an answer
    And a solution for everything.

    Feel free in the future
    To come to me
    For advice

    Be careful, know this now
    I may be sceptical

    Come to me
    I might be a friend

    You will be surprised to discover
    Although we are no longer lovers

    I know exactly how to respond

    Just don’t bring the same old

    Same old
    That broke the relationship

    That can longer be a part of us

    I hope in the future we can remain friends​
    :(
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel your heart, there's an old saying... "You had your run, but now you're done!!"
    I like the lay-out of this piece poet.
     
  3. LindaChavis

    LindaChavis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You hit...

    ..the nail on the head

    :bingo:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whew...breaking up is never easy, especially if the relationship lasted a long time. I know what it is to have trusted information used against you. It hurts like hell. I felt the intensity of this flow.
     
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    YungMiss Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    `Exhales` Whoo that was a good one..nice flow! :great:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautiful write poet keep speaking and scribing
     
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