Black Poetry : When You Can

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by lilcherry76, Aug 19, 2004.

  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    when ever you find the time to call me,
    let me know.
    i'll be waiting to hear,
    from you.
    waiting patiently,
    by the phone.
    when ever you find the time to look at me,
    let me know.
    i'll be sitting beside you,
    looking at the side of your face.
    waiting patiently,
    for you to look my way.
    when ever you find the time to hang out with me,
    let me know.
    i'll be telling my friends,
    maybe next time.
    waiting patiently,
    to hang out with you.
    when ever you find the time to walk with me,
    let me know.
    i'll be looking at my shadow,
    on the ground.
    waiting patiently,
    for you to walk with me.
    when ever you find the time to be with me,
    let me know.
    i'll be standing away from the crowd,
    at the back of the room.
    waiting patiently,
    for you to get through.
    and when ever you find the time to remember me,
    let me know.
    i'll be sitting on a bench,
    on Memory Lane at Lonely Avenue.
    waiting patiently,
    for you to come back for me............. :(
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh do allow me to add a "last" line...

    "Whenever you find the time to get to memory lane, and there's no :nono: longer to hearts, but one... on that old oak tree, ...someone was sitting here ...lonely too."

    this piece was beautiful, I just loved it, and I do think whenever he decide to open his eyes...he'll only see "presious memories" ...thanks for sharing a lovely poem.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this cascade inside my heart a very dear flow
    tyte scribing lil sis...
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    enjoyed this very much...
    likes the vibe
    thanks for sharing

    Angel
     
  5. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    queentswana, i loved it, feel free to add a line or whatever you like anytime, thanks again.

    thank you RICH, it's been a while and i wanted to make a nice peaceful come back.

    and thank you mzblkangel for reading, much love to you..........


    thank you all from the bottom of my soul........ :jumping:
     
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    hmmm...
    this flow was
    touched me beyond
    the words...for I know
    these thoughts all too well
    ...but I'm thankful that one
    day...I stopped waiting because
    I realized...my future was much
    brighter and in my future there
    was someone waiting for my
    arrival...someone who would
    never make me wait again... :wink:

    Love this flow!
     
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    I felt this on a personal level. you tryna make a sista tear up ...nice write.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel you here, waiting for something that you desire dearly, but the other person doesn't. And so you keep hoping, some day. But, one day you will decide to get up and keep on walking. This was a touching piece.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, I too have been in a place like this. Very emotively dropped, and so touching.
     
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    Deep emotional flow and nice delivery!