Black Poetry : When Things Fall Apart

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  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    when things fall apart
    the world stops spinning
    on a dime
    a few pennies no longer
    make 2 sense
    oxygen does not help
    you breathe it is the
    odorless substitute
    that kills you ...

    and

    remembering how
    to properly inhale and exhale
    is so
    hard that you collapse and turn
    dark blue...

    when things fall apart
    words no longer ring
    true
    and all of the letters in the
    alphabet
    s e p a r a t e themselves
    from one another
    and refuse to work
    together
    making communication
    very difficult to do

    it is hard to determine
    where to go or
    what to say
    how to act or
    who to believe

    when things fall apart
    everything is irrelevant
    and i wonder
    should i pick
    up the pieces
    and just start
    all over again?




    (c) 2001 SOULOFASISTA
     
  2. alyce

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    Very well said

    and you know exactly what it is you, and we all must do, when things fall apart! Thinking people have no other choice.

    Tight

    Thank you


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  3. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    very well

    thought loved the concept!
    yes the talent is omnipresent
    and i respect it

    and N2 what you did for me you don't even know

    you helped my spirit to see my truth more clearly knowing that i am one but one of many

    it is above as it is below
    it is below as it is above

    or sumpin like dat

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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This too real

    We must find the strength to dust ourselves off and try again and again and again.
    Very true piece. I've lived your poem in a past life:)

    MadLove:heart: Coco
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    WHEN THINGZ FALL APART

    WE MUST PRAY HOLD ON AND HAVE FAITH
    WE MUST TRUST IN SELF AND KNOW THINGZ
    WILL BECOME BETTER THEN YESTERDAY
    LOOKING INTO TOMORROW...........................
    THIS PIECE IS FELT WORLD WIDE .
     
  6. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sustah A

    I couldn't agree with you more!

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  7. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So'ja

    Thank you for your response! By now, you should definitely know I got madd :heart: for ya' Boo!

    One.
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Coco

    It's always great to hear that someone can "relate" to a piece... even if it was, as you say, "in a past life"!

    Thank you sista friend!

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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$

    So I see this scribe moved you too! Thank ya' sugah!

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    quoting the roots...

    when things fall apart...never do what they do.


    tyten up*

    staytogetherandthrive.


    sean.
     
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