Black Poetry : When its all said n done (unfinished piece...lookin 4 ne1 who wants 2 do a collabo)

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  1. sarcasm4eva

    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    when its all said n done....
    where did i go wrong?
    was it b/c i told u i love u?
    or was it b/c i couldnt stand 2 b around u
    maybe i didnt do nething wrong......
    it was u along who didnt love me
    but u couldnt tell me that 4 some reason either
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Nice start...but I pass on collabos at the moment.
     
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    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx monetary..appreciate it
     
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    Yw, lady...I'm hopin' that one of the other brothas jump on this.
     
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    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ill wait till some more peeps r feelin it or not..........lol :)
     
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    didn't know if you wanted female or male response. but here ya go!

    when its all said n done....
    where did i go wrong?
    was it b/c i told u i love u?
    or was it b/c i couldnt stand 2 b around u
    maybe i didnt do nething wrong......
    it was u along who didnt love me
    but u couldnt tell me that 4 some reason either


    Well, it's not said and it's definitely not done.
    It was not me all along.
    You told me you loved me, but you failed to show it.
    Your words followed by no attention equal bittnerness.
    I try to love you with the best of me,
    But like you said, you couldn't stand to be around me unforturnately.
    If you're willing, we can work it about together,
    If it's not in you I'd like you to set me free forever.
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    but when it's really said and dayum near done
    i want to leave lettin you know i was da one
    da one who held yo hand even when you weren't paid
    da one who neva held her tongue but said wat she had to say
    da one who wasn't yo woman but yo female friend
    da one who let you know wat was wrong and everythang within
    da one who was scared to set you free
    but now since it's done free you shall be

    i'm almost always down fa a partner in crime lol :)-------serenti
     
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    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx Royal_T...im really feelin that........do i have ur permission to post that part? :)
     
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    sarcasm4eva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx serenti-poet.......imsooo feelin that........now i have 2 versions, thanx 2 u.........much love
     
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    back at ya keep flowin and i'll keep enjoyin
     
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