Black Poetry : when i write

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  1. karma55

    karma55 Active Member MEMBER

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    When I write!
    I write like this,
    With the flick of a wrist
    Expression of thoughts
    Not to be bought
    Just so the next generation can say they’ve been taught
    So when I write
    I make it simple
    Loss the dictionary words so your brain won’t feel crippled
    And cut straight to the chase
    See I write and through the truth in your face
    Tell you my mistakes and make’em your own
    See through my eyes not make the same wrong
    Cus I write what I should have been all along
    Vicariously through me see where I shouldn’t have gone
    But this pen is like my weapon
    Make a weak me strong
    And my struggles don’t seem so hard anymore
    Now I can write for that kid in the streets
    Making his beats on a cardboard box
    Walking ground to feet cus he got on these holy *** socks
    And moms aint around out hoping for some rocks
    If he ever saw the life i'm crying over
    He’d give me props
    And I write knowing I should change
    And I’m writing this to you hoping you’d do them same
    And it’s only to empower you
    Giving you protection from ghost you once thought could devour you
    There’s a dream hidden inside
    And I WRITE to get it out of!
     
  2. karma55

    karma55 Active Member MEMBER

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    CRITICIZE PLEASE

    PLEASE GIVE ME YOU CRITICISM HONESTLY DONT HOLD BACK THIS IS GOES ANY OF MY POEMS POSTED ON THIS FORUM
     
  3. Ikoro

    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    EY YO!

    Brothaaaaaa.

    I felt that to the heart. Mad flow and -real- nice pictures being painted. Seriously this is hot.

    Consider me touched and waiting for more!

    "Expression of thoughts
    Not to be bought
    Just so the next generation can say they’ve been taught"

    WORD.

    One.

    ~Ikoro
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Self healing is always the best kind, wonderful piece poet...^5
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    DEEP SIGH............
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yes poet

    the pen can be used as a weapon

    keeping writing

    more power comes from it
     
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    re:write

    Very good write.:welldone:
     
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