Black Poetry : when i went slumming

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Jan 26, 2004.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i feel my stomach churning
    just from the thought of you
    hearing your voice makes me cringe
    seeing your face makes me sick
    all i can think of is blue suede shoes
    your voice deep and thick
    wanting to know what makes me tick
    your lines are so played and frayed and lame
    "oh just something about you ma"
    you mumble...i have to keep saying could you speak up?
    (can you hear me now?)
    at first i was taken by the way you look
    but clearly you're not on my level
    tried to take a sista down with your
    candle burning antics and your bull-s-h-y-t semantics
    i escaped just barely
    only to be ashamed
    i tried to edit your weak a-s-s game
    of how it really should have gone
    in reality, it didn't last long
    cause I had to deal with the situation
    told the truth in an after the fact relation
    and someone who means the world got angry with me
    for dealing with blue suede shoes
    thick ghetto accents
    and not being straight up
    if only he knew
    i woulda NEVER traded him for you
    and today it's just quiet
    voices screaming in my head
    caught in a lie
    i'd be better off dead
    than to have you think less of me
    but i guess that's what happens when you go slumming
     
  2. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    huh... dig that...
    go head Sistah Lady Poet..
    I'm really feelin' the repugnance :puke:
    AND self recovery in this piece..
    Keep flowin'..


    Much Peace,
    Akilah :spinstar:
     
  3. Khasm13

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    lol...attak of da wack
    game that is...
    the only reason brother keep come'n with the corn
    is because it's not always meet with scorn...
    i liked this piece right here...keep drop'n em sis
    one love
    khasm
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop
    thats all i can say
    very nice.....
    flow on..... :angel1:
     
  5. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Akilah, Khasm and Mzblackangel...I appreciate the feedback and the encouragement.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Liked the way you posed this scribe of mistakes made but a lesson learned, flow on.
     
  7. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks watzinaname, there's always those that try to make you come out of your "self".
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed Redlady dis was awesome drop thing they try to do
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you rich!
     
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    PLAYED OUT PLAYERS AND HIDDEN AGENDA'S!

    OOOOOOOOOOOOOH CHILE!
    I had a blind date with someone who couldn't
    wait. Said he had his **** together, in the
    broadcast biz, he was trying to find commonality
    with this miz...but, my radar went up when I heard
    some contradictions...there was too much desperation
    and way to much aggravation...phone call after phone
    call saying when we gone get together...When I
    clearly stated that being aggressive is not better.
    When you come on to strong with Miz, you will surely
    get dismissed, with your Played out Player ways and
    way to many un-busy days...So I too learned my
    lesson and now I got the Chocolate prize...don't
    go "Chasing Waterfall's" when we got a pot of gold
    right before our eyes!
    Stay up! Queen, we all make mistakes!
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE! :wink:
     
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