Black Poetry : When I Was A Star

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  1. monad.poetress

    monad.poetress Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When I Was A Star :spinstar:
    By Mona...




    When I Was A Star :spinstar:
    I really used to shine
    But now my dreams are gone
    and my life is intertwined
    When I was A Star :spinstar:
    My smile brightened the day
    now my smile has vanished
    and my happiness is gone away
    When I was A Star :spinstar:
    I loved Mona to death
    Even though she had no fame
    she didn't have any wealth
    But now the star has fallen
    All her beams
    no more
    All her happiness is gone
    No reason to smile anymore
    But when I was a star :spinstar:
    I shined just for me
    But now I'm just a star
    thats been released and set free
     
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    wow what a twisted irony my sista...indeed...
    but what good is a star if it cant be free to shine :)
    love it :)
     
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    this was so moving
    you always evoke
    such emotion from
    your pieces...

    Soul stirring piece...
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    loved how the journey shifted and took me to a place of freedom...
    nice...very nice
     
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    Whoa, very moving and so so tight. Flow on
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    You may not be the same star as before, but you still shine, even more so cause you're free. I could feel the meaning here, keep flowing, I'll keep reading.
     
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    this was a journey. i love the way you posed this piece.
    and enjoyed the read very much.
    thanks for sharing a part of you with us....:)
    peace
    Angel
     
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