Black Poetry : When I looked in your eyes!

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  1. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I saw , peacefulness, and I saw unrest.
    I saw satisfaction and discontent.
    I saw wealth, poorly spent.
    I saw brilliance start to fade.
    I saw arms reaching that truly didn't want
    to be saved.

    When I looked in your eyes...
    I saw passion, and I saw duplicity!
    I saw compassion , and I saw indifference!
    I saw pride and I saw shame.
    I saw forgiveness but I also saw blame.
    I saw a heart wanting, but closed to anyone
    new.
    When I looked in your eyes
    I saw you!
    But you didn't see me!:confused:
    BJS(C)2001
     
  2. epiphany

    epiphany Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nicely done...

    Keep dem words a flowin......


    epiphany :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!

    into my eyes was a sweet surprise
    my heart and soul was mesmerized
    under the cast of beauty un seen
    and the love that it bring
    so i wake up in tyme...:)
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feeling this

    and I love how you broke it down....

    "When I looked in your eyes
    I saw you!

    But you didn't see me!


    too true, too often...

    thank you

    a
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Loved the way you worked this one... Very Talented!!!

    Madd Respect
    Reas
     
  6. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks dear Scribes!

    "I want to thank you for letting me be myself"....Sly and the Family Stone 1970! nuff said
    Blessings on Ya houses!:D
     
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