Black Poetry : When I close my eyes...........

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  1. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I close my eyes to see......

    Serenity
    I feel the divinity
    around me
    surrounds me
    in my heart
    in my soul
    i don't long for earthly things such as gold
    Sometimes when I close my eyes
    I see peace
    I try to wear the sheep clothing fleece
    but my heart gets heavy
    my lyfe ever so unsteady
    If the lord was to call me will I be ready
    I know lord i havent been your god-fearing child
    But I love the fact you gave me a smile
    and the ability to get by
    I know you see me cry
    But Father I thank you anyway
    When I close my eyes to see
    I see Hope
    The chains, the shackles, the rope
    has weighed a sista down
    I wore constantly a frown
    Till I just said Oh Father release the
    Anger
    Stress
    Being Depressed
    Fed up
    Fustration
    Help me before I end up Damnation
    And so I went to sleep
    My mind slowly begin to drift to creep
    To a realm
    I never saw before
    Lyfe lessons and so much more
    And I begin to feel the light around me
    The positivity
    Captured me
    Till I felt the burdens that was weighing me down
    Seems to lift to the heavens cause there no longer around
    I said Thank you Father for giving me your hand
    I only know that you have the key and the masterplan
    So now everytime I close my eyes I see
    Love!!!!!!!!!!!

    Copyright 2006
    Nevar​
     
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    Beautiful..............
     
  3. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you so much love!​
     
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    I can surely relate to that one...
    If you have faith of a mustard seed...Heaven shall/will be yours.
    Great piece poet...^5
     
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    Nevar this is really BEAUTIFUL
     
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    Unfortunately everytime I close my eyes I'm still seeing chicken with Lousiana hotsauce, but I like your POV better than mine. I think I'm amazed most with the last part of this piece. The part that goes, "everytime I close my eyes I see Love." I ain't just saying it neither so don't get the big head, but I was thinking along the lines of what a person might see when they close their eyes for the last time. You know how people always say that their life flashes before their eyes in those final seconds, but maybe its more than that. Maybe love actually flashes before our eyes in that moment and that's why in the movies they show people dreaming of their loved ones before they finally close their eyes. I have to say I'm intrigued by this and you definitely took it to a higher level!
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    to the fam thanks for showing this she dont know what she is today. and Emissary you wild man! holla at me!
     
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    love it
    great work
     
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    Now see, I thought I had already responded to this. What a devine and up-lifting piece. God helps us to see past so much negativity, and face the peace. This was wonderful.
     
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    thanks for the love shown to me fam!
     
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