Black Poetry : What's on my mind (for 4everluv)

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  1. A007

    A007 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    On a daily basis I have a thousand thoughts running rampant
    many of them are philanthropic, a couple about the plan for mansions
    I laugh at people and our awkward existance
    we stumble through our lives with pride and persistance
    that scarcely lead us to enlightenment or peace
    we steal, kill, and destroy ourselves and sometimes it makes me weep

    I often think of the beauty of our black queens
    and how so called men tear down their dreams
    selfishness and ignorance erase their self-esteem
    they intrude on innocense and muffle ear piercing screams

    I sometimes daydream of hurting all who hurt my loved ones
    wish bad things upon their person, their daughters, and sons
    the anger always gives way to intelligent voices
    telling me that I have other, more constructive choices

    I constantly consider the plight of our race in this place
    the solutions we have to recognize the changes we HAVE TO make
    and is this a rat race or a journey set at our own pace
    or will we leave this earth with only signs of disdain and disgrace

    I covertly comtemplate the real reason we were created
    the infinate possibilities are enough to drive one crazy
    but it's a trip to simply study every angle and phase
    rarely I feel like I am at the end of the maze

    Every day our estimate a different plan to succeed
    how do I know which one is right or how to proceed?
    Yeah, there are new thoughts every hour, day, and week
    in fact, I went through about 25 while writing this piece.
     
  2. Tantrum

    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a nice peace of struggle
    and discouragement and tiredness of the
    things we go through
    7/10
    uno
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    surely i can relate to the many things that change through da mind
    and the struggle on the daily base we face in life.
     
  4. 4EVERLUV

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    THANK YOU FOR SHARING...

    I first want to tell you thank for keeping your word and sharing your thoughts with me.

    I see a lot of things are running through your mind. When I first read this piece it was today while I was at work around 3pm from that moment my concentration had been broken for the next hour I thought about all the things you mentioned and even read it about 3 times and said to myself WOW those are some really heavy thoughts and to think those were just a few. But then I thought about how I have similar thoughts. But your articulation was so smooth.

    A007 this was really nice, you letting me inside your mind for moment.

    Now do me another favor (I bet your saying she sure does ask for a lot of things).
    I want you to sit back and just relax and not think.:) Thanks again.

    Much luv to you
     
  5. NapturallyYours

    NapturallyYours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece is beautifully laid out, and like 4everluv, my mind has been a million places since reading it. Excellent Poet!

    Napturally
     
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    A million and one choices lie before us, some easier than others, sometimes we choose in our favor, other times, we make choices we pay for the rest of our lives.. Just a few thoughts that crept up in my mind while reading this poet. Well done.
     
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    Powerful and full of wisdom.
     
  8. IfUComeSoftly

    IfUComeSoftly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    simply beautiful...
     
  9. A007

    A007 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you thank you thank you. And I try to sit back and not think...BUT IT IS HARD!!
     
  10. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    They say free your mind and the rest shall follow been then their thought may not of been like yours. SO in line with mine they I think you took a peek. I loved this poet
     
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