Black Poetry : What You Doin To Me

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  1. SoothinDivinity

    SoothinDivinity Active Member MEMBER

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    Hey everybody this is my first poem that I'm posting on here. I hope you like it and understand where my mind was when I wrote this piece. It's kinda a simple poem but its one of my favorites because it's the only way I could express these feelings I was having.

    What You Doin To Me?

    Approaching me everyday
    Your consistent, always the exact same way
    You look at me and think you've got me all figured out
    I'm sorry to ruin you ideas but this girl is not what she seems to be about.

    Usually I'm not so defensive but you got my mind in a daze
    When I look your way my whole reality enters a haze
    I like to argue wit you, prove you wrong when you think you right
    I just don't know what you doin to me, got this simple girl always ready to fight.

    And the irony of all this
    Is that if you just asked I would gladly give you more then a kiss.
    I'd give you my complete heart, I was just scared to do it from the start
    Cause you triggered something in me that I've yet to see in all my 18 years
    You got me wishin that we had shared childhood tears.

    I know we argue alot and this is gonna come as a big shock
    But I want you alot
    I know I might have messed up my chance, when I turned you down that first time
    Now you probably think of me as just an annoying friend but trust me I'd do almost anything to get our arguing to end.


    I have to make you mine
    Your the only one who excepts me for me
    You actually appreciate the woman I have the capability to be.
    You don't put me down for havin yet to give it up
    In fact you admire me for that and I know your sincere when you say
    "Naw I wasn't tryin to ****"

    I know I've been pushin you away
    Wit my attitude and the way I say the things I say
    I was just scared cause I knew from the start
    That when I started talkin to you I'd have to give you my whole heart

    But now I'm ready for all you offer
    I dont know how you broke down the barriers around my heart
    What You Doin To Me?

    You didnt have me totally figured out but you knew what our love could be about
    You saw potential that I couldnt see
    Man, sometimes I just sit and wonder what the hell you doin to me?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the new home you found
    welcome from above as i bless this some love
    welcome to the family of peace & respect

    This was deep and correct i felt u on dis
    the emotions of love and what u see in his heart
    and how u feel ya mind flowing from emotions
    and what he doing to u ....flow on look to read more of you
    welcome to the family
    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
  3. SoothinDivinity

    SoothinDivinity Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks

    Thanks for the welcome. I was a little shy to post my stuff but with that kinda kindness and welcome I'm gonna try to let down my guard.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    please do we family here with love and support
    and know we have Mods that always have there Guards up for the safty
    and respect of members so make your self at home u know u are and
    look around the house we have a room for u as well welcome to the family
    flow head in da grace of home .
    peace unto u w / luv
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to destee!!! Sometimes the person we feel will just make a good friend is that and more. Write some more for us to read, relax and stay a while!!!!
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey honey, don't stop postin, cause I really enjoy your work! You got skillz, and I'm really glad you're sharing them with us. Welcome to the family.
     
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    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to the Destee Family!!! I hope to read more of ur tyte flows. Girl u jus dropped it like its hott with this one! Much love always!!! :terrific:
     
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    welcome to the hot spot... join the fam... get comfortable... and drop some more ....
     
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    Hi and welcome to our warm hearts,
    I like what you dropped on us, if you keep pouring it...we'll keep reading and enjoying, thanks for sharing a part of you.
     
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    Welcome, thank you for allowing this loving community the opportunity to embrace you.
     
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