Black Poetry : What You Do To Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by tashatoya, Nov 3, 2004.

  1. tashatoya

    tashatoya Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Okay this is my 1st Post So i hope you guys like it!

    What You Do To Me

    You've done things to me in 2 months
    That have taken people 2 years
    You have made me feel secure and comfortable
    And have taken away my fears,
    I draw you near and near
    And you understand my sense of idenity
    This has to be some kind of Divine Divinty
    Because you are understanding me inside out
    Gotten into my mind to see what I'm about
    You have weaved and wove all throughout a
    Poets heart and Soul
    Lighting me up with tells of the untold, because
    Not once did I even happen to open my mouth to modify
    My verbs for your nouns
    Your making my heart jump leaps and bounds
    I love the fact that I don't have to use any sounds,
    Because Spoken Word within itself hops
    Leaps and Mounds
    I never thought I'd find somebody more Profound-
    Than me
    Than that's it! It's declared- We must, We were meant to be!
    Or maybe once again, I'm just convincing myself for you...
    Uh Oh, Silly Me!
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome

    :hearthis:
    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house u found in peace
    welcome from above to bless this piece some love
    wow tyte drop of how one make u feel ..............
    :kickball: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave
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    hope u stay a while share a few smiles as u flow and get a membership
    at destee's to enjoy all benefits as a premium member and support a community of loving wisdom peace
    look at all you get and features at destee's
    http://www.destee.com/forums/showthread.php?t=26882
    again welcome aboard the family poeticly :D
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello and welcome
    likes the vibe very smooth
    and posed well..
    thanks for sharing apart of you
    with us....

    we also have our very own
    voice chat, come share or listen
    to the family flow
    on friday nights poetry thrown down
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    Peace
    Angel
     
  4. hisili

    hisili Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome and yea I very much enjoy ur 1st drop tasha
    feelin tha flow and tone of this poem.
    Sincerely,
    H, i
    s, i
    l, i
    yea my flow is so fly :)
     
  5. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    :wave: Hello and Welcome TashaToya :wave:

    Sister Sister Sister !!! What took you so long ??!! Where ya been iz et ??!!!

    You registered a year ago, but you iz jes' given us this beautiful flow from you ??!!

    Oh Noooo Sister ... this is definitely against the rules ... it's gotta be ?!!!

    Hold up ... let me check da rule manual ... :read: ... yep ... shole iz ...

    it clearly says on page 595, paragraph 33, line 22 ...

    you can't have this kinda beautiful poetry inside yo' self and not share it !!!

    Okay Sister ... we gonna let you off da hook this time ... but don't let this happen again! :wink:

    Beautiful Work Sister !!! :toast:

    Thanks for sharing and please make yourself at home, because you are!

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  6. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it was very well posed indeed and for this to be your first one, well...........not with me you know me already (smile) keep up the good work sis sit back and relax :massage: you're gonna be here a while so get use to us here in the family aight? holla at you later sis.........again :welldone:




    until next time
     
  7. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    First of all,
    I would like to say to sis Destee.
    that we shouldnt let her off the hook,
    I think we should make her out of an example.
    Cuz its totaly unfair how she is just holding back all this beauty...
    But girl, i loved your work, it has a really nice vibe.
    "KEEP EM COMIN"...1
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really like this...

    I know what this feels like, its hard to describe but it seems you've managed to do it. great job. peace n love.