Black Poetry : what would she say? (inspi'ahed by elayne.)

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  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it crosses my mind.

    what would she say if i called her up
    or better yet
    met
    her
    at
    her
    doorstep
    with ardor that surpasses reality--
    ardor is love for those--
    who don't know--
    but a love
    that with absence has grown exponentially--
    what would she say if
    i told her that my heart aches and
    i cry every day
    and i think of what us would have been--
    i think of us in present day--
    i think of us right now--
    i think of us forever--

    what would she say?

    would she embrace the thought that after--
    years
    she
    was
    that
    definitive meal
    that sat in my system
    that
    that mark in time that
    ceased the swing of my life's pendulum--
    that

    'every'

    to my

    'thing'

    what would she say if i told her i couldn't live without her--
    and was unsure how i had gone about daily life
    to this very second
    without her
    presence...

    the thought conquers my nights
    like
    sleeping near the railroad tracks

    the noise is great and
    my mind is
    cluttered with thoughts of she...
    but i know she
    and she won't
    believe.


    (iloveyoubeyondtime)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    keep da ink droppin' flowin sweetly
     
  3. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tps.


    (completely working on the premise that
    you don't happen to know another elayne)

    ...i'ont know what i possibly could have
    done to "inspi'ah" this beautiful peace.
    but... whatever it was i'm overjoyed that
    you saw it/heard it or felt it & i'll happily
    take the credit. :D

    this is wonderful work... but then again
    you jess roll like dat!
    (witheverypoeticbreathupossess) :wink:

    alwayspeace,
    elayne.
     
  4. Dream Weaver

    Dream Weaver Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    TPS as I've seen so far, your work is wonderful and completely and exasperatingly true. Like Cindy says you should go on and tell her, after all you don't own tomorrow! If only I could find a guy who would say such to me. The "Lucky gurl", I envy her.

    I'm just sayin...


    P.S if you want I could weave the setting for y'all.:wink: :luvv: <---thats you.
     
  5. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (laughing)

    thank u guys for the read....goaheadandweavemydreamsDW
     
  6. poeticdelight

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    Beautiful Work Poet!

    Elayne came into chat and ask us for some inspiration.

    I told her, "Don't front.." :lol:

    nice flow sean

    keep it coming :toast:

    peace

    poeticd

    :heart:
     
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    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what would she say ? Absolutley nothing ...for these words would render her speechless !

    Beautiful love
    Natasha
     
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    Royal_T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think this is ABSOLUTELY beautiful!!!!
     
  9. vivacious vixen

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    sweet

    elayne is a very lucky woman. i hope that she feels the same way you do. love is a beautiful thing and you definately know how express it through your words. scribe on poetsean!!!!
    :love: :love: :love: :love: :love: :love: :love: :love: :love:
     
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