Black Poetry : What was wrong......They said

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  1. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The world has grown cold
    It seems like everywhere you look there is a bad soul
    I turned to the elder to see what was wrong
    They said the situation has always been around just prolonged
    They said children don't know what they had to go through
    They fought WWI and WII
    They said they could stay out to twelve in the mourning
    But now it's not like that they say children are only torturing
    They said most of the children don't have fathers
    So how can they strive any farther
    I said I know this can't be right
    So I went to the children to what was wrong
    They said the adults don't understand their side
    They said they knew they would say something like that but they had to much pride
    They said they had enough knowledge to invent the internet
    They said they're even working on a cure for the aids effect
    They said the reason most children don't have fathers
    Is because they don't like their sex partners
    They said that the reason most boys are being thugs
    Is because their families are not showing them love
    I evaluated both side of the story and found
    That it's both children and adults faults that this world is all turned around
    If they would come together
    Maybe the world would last a little longer
    Maybe there would be peace
    Not just for black but for every race
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very True FoxyLady. I like your insightfull dialog. Get this one out to the masses.
     
  3. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank You, Hodee. I hope by reading this peiece I touch your heart. Thank you very, very, much for your reply.
     
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    this is very true...
    if they only could...
    peace
    khasm
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice piece...i like it alot...
     
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    you are flowing,this is a wonderful, it is a wish for so many...i like how you breaking it down..
    Peace
     
  7. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you LovelyGoldenOne,Bluewater, and Khasm13 it is very good to read your replies. Spread the love and peace.
    Love, foxy.....
     
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    dang girl, I'm just watching you from afar , watching your flows blossom cuz this one was tyte :)
     
  9. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank You SwtT
    It's good to hear from you to me
    Look for more of your replies in the future
    Peace and Love,
    Foxy........
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    from above i see da depth of ya scribe
    dis was tyte true flowin'
    let ya pen speaketh on !
     
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