Black Poetry : What Never Was

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by PoeticAlize, Dec 19, 2007.

  1. PoeticAlize

    PoeticAlize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    f-ing is what we did
    f-ed is how i feel
    in addition to "used"... and "worthless"
    but according to your philosophy
    that should be about rite
    cuz you said
    "if i give my all and you give nothing
    what will i have left?"
    but see the tables have turned
    and i can answer your question
    you would have nothing
    but a broken heart
    a scarred spirit
    and an undescribable shallow depth in your punce
    my punce
    the warm cavern
    that i offered up to you soo many nites
    and wen i didnt
    i still gave in
    expected soo much
    from soo little
    but your not all to blame
    cuz you gave me hints
    only handing out invites
    wen the sun went down
    but you would call me all day
    let me leave my clothes
    at your apartment
    but hid them
    in the backs of closets
    and the bottoms of drawers
    you wanted all of me
    but none of me
    denied my deepest feelings
    so you could get the deepest feeling
    didnt dare ask you
    to sacrafice
    that tite, gushy, just for you punce
    for protection
    instead
    i did
    sacraficed commonsense
    for your sense...
    of touch
    and speaking of which
    was it really too much to ask for
    to have you guarding me
    instead of pimping me ("flirt with him to get us a drink")
    exploitin me ("you could make a lot of money as a stripper")
    not claimin me ("she's jus an incubator for my ****")
    and on the real
    this mite be the lil gurl in me
    but i liked you
    **** near loved you
    and i expected
    soo
    much
    more
    from you
    but with expectations
    comes disappointment
    and im past that
    im
    just
    hurt
     
  2. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    Hey.... I know what you are talking about...... I think we have all been there, and have compromised ourselves when in our heart of hearts we knew better....

    Sometimes I think, for women, we love so hard that we loose sight of who we are....

    An orgasm.... only about 30 seconds..... the pain and agony that comes after being used can last a lifetime...

    If you can't be his everything then don't be his anything....

    The truth is the first time someone hurts you... SHAME ON THEM.... the second, the third and so fouth.. it's SHAME ON YOU FOR LETTING IT CONTINUE...

    Way to grasp these emotions........ thanks for sharing.
     
  3. watzinaname

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    Wow... I have to second what Miss Lady already said so very well. We all want to be loved, so much so, that we sometimes accept sloppy seconds, then feel like yesterday's garbage in the aftermath. Perfectly posed poetess.
     
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    feeling u surely i can relate
     
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    Hi PoeticAlize
    Feeling the hurt, and sadness in your poem.
    And the growth, because after realizing
    how you have given your all, nothing
    was given back,and it's showing me
    the maturely level that you taken in really seeing
    the whole picture. And it's not to your liking. Much love sis.
    Keep the ink coming.

    Peace~N~Love
     
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    Phenomenon Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OMG, that right there...they usually say the truth hurts, but sometimes it kills. You killed that in such a beautiful way man. So many lines struck my heart. Loved all of it
     
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    Wow! U hit deep with this one. I don't think anyone could have flowed that how u did. I felt that Sista!
     
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    Yes wow. I can feel you on this one.
    A wonderful write and it flowed so well too.
    I can feel your hurt. Great poem.
     
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    I agree that we love so hard sometimes and are eager to give all of ourselves...but to whose demise? Usually our own unfortunately! Sweet revelations, poetess!
     
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