Black Poetry : What My Woman Should Say

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  1. Eric Mitchell

    Eric Mitchell Active Member MEMBER

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    What My Woman Should Say


    Solitary poet alone in the woods, come into the clearing and be with me. Take my hand and walk beside me. And please, by all means, continue your verse. I have watched you work, and have seen the skill in your craft. I relish your sobering words in moments of deep thoughts shared. Equally prized are the times when you reach inside me and draw forth laughter uncontrolled. Please resume the accounts of your life and let me relive them with you through your words, as we will create experiences together in days to come. Give me access to your world and I will try to present you gifts equal to what you have given me. As a bonus, my bosom will support your head at days end, when your work is done. So continue your verse, and I will be your chorus as you move me to love.


    By Eric Mitchell
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done dis was moving
     
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    i likes this
    very well done!!!
     
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    Maybe she do say it ...in silence or in her actions. everyone say things in different ways. (jmo)
     
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    Love speaks in so many different ways, but if it's not in the way that you feel that you need it to be spoken, it often goes unheard. This piece blew my mind....nuff said.
     
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    I CAN REALLY RELATE TO THIS PIECE.

    FOR ONLY YOUR MIND,PEN AND PAPER CAN TRULY HOLD THE DEPTH OF YOUR WORK, OTHERS CAN ONLY TOUCH THE SURFACE OF YOUR PASSION, FOR THE WORK THAT YOU CREATE
     
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    reply to Eric Mitchell

    Eric Mitchell, A secret admirer of some poetess you be
    I wish your female counterpart would contact me
    Every one of us poets seek love for our words
    To be loved and held makes us soar like birds


    Great poem you have made
    Now go and seize a great day

    Please show me some of your love
    Today read and reply to my thread
    " Dear Alpha Male, please help me, signed the slave from torment land"
    Please tell me about my skills, tell me if their weak
    or show nuff real----------Thank You
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well my brotha :look: it would seem that you know exactly what to say :) This read like a scene in a love novel :read:
     
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    :deal: Brother Eric,

    I am moved by this piece, but feel like I am choking on what I want to say about it. I'm a little speechless. I'll be back to add to my comment, but I wanted to move it up for the others who may have missed it. Peace and blessings
     
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    I LOVE THIS!!
     
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