Black Poetry : what my daddy told me

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  1. NileReflection

    NileReflection Active Member MEMBER

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    See, my daddy told me
    about this
    What you just did to me
    too bad, i was shaking in my knees
    you're always breaking in my dreams

    See, my daddy told me
    not to let you touch me ungently
    I told him you kissed me
    violently
    violet
    purple
    blue hiccies on my face

    See, my daddy told me
    i wouldn't care after the first time
    i wasn't scared after the first time
    because love is pain, right?
    its all the same, right?

    See, my daddy told me
    One day you'd kill me
    But i died along time ago
    even though i still breathe

    See, my daddy told me
    that my heart would get cold
    and that i would grow old
    and i would need you
    i do already

    i need you to
    love me, to hate me,to bat me, to rape me
    S C R E A M
    to control me, to hold me
    d
    o
    w
    n
    But that's all i know now...
    The only thing i know is what my daddy told me
    and YOU
    You making love bleed form my split lip
    Love is blind...so am i
    From these swollen eyes

    See, my daddy told me
    that i would call when you called
    my name
    and go insane if things didn't change
    But I'm fine
    all you need is love right?
    love right
    love right
    love,
    right?
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh my young sister :(

    :grouphug:
    Peace
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl.... you done knocked em' out of the box with this truly HOTTISH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
  4. NileReflection

    NileReflection Active Member MEMBER

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    Peace

    Thanks for the love on this one. This is a very personal poem so your replies mean the world to me. :thanks:
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    one thing I know is that scribing is therapeutic, healing, cathartic....i also know and believe this....you are a natural...you have a gift...and as long as you write, you will see where you have been with clarity, and know where you need to go with certainty, this drop is...powerful
    period !!! Please...keep writing.
     
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    even though the first time should be special...
    it's not most of the times...
    love is only the glue...
    patience, communication and effort
    are things that run a relationship...
    this poem was incredible...
    let the pain run out of the pen tip
    and on to the computer screen...
    cause it will get better...
    one love
    khasm
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sweetie, I'm not sure how I missed this one a few weeks ago, but I apologize. This touches me so deeply. I am sendin you much love and peace, sistah :grouphug: Be strong, be strong
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow !!! u really laid it out this was well felt
    much love & peace unto u sistah Queen
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...this was truly a strong piece
    Our daddys often tell us a lot of things
    the unfortunate thing is that we don't
    always listen until it's too late...
    and we've fallen so deeply
    we can't get out...
    feeling the flow..def
     
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