Quiet Poetry Lounge : " what if we..." (another jh and angelicsage col-loveration)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by j'hiah, Oct 21, 2003.

  1. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    angelicsage-
    What if we...
    lndulgently...
    Create impassioned rhapsody
    lnterlace for hours
    ln poetic verbosity
    A harmonious surrender
    Hand holding...and
    Private negotiations
    .........over eternity

    What if we
    Whisper quietly, over seasons
    Exchanging soul confessions
    Man, woman & purity of unity
    The twilight of ecstasy
    Tender...autumn kisses
    Touches...long awaited
    Giving in / Taking "time"
    lnto captivity
    Transcendentally leap into
    Forever's horizon

    What if we...
    Redefine heaven, dream & sunrise
    Come together as reality
    Mentally connect, spiritually re-birth
    Wantonly...in...each...soul kiss
    Become one.....in the moment
    Exist infinite...within the garden
    Our names, lingering on Love's Lips
    ..........and we
    Lost...in the eyes of each

    What if we...
    .....................take
    ...............................the next step...

    What if
    ...................we...

    jh-
    incessantly
    you flow in my streams...
    rippling
    dreams
    which touch you,
    hold you
    taste you until l awaken and see
    that there is actually no
    cleft under these streams
    through which
    l could have you...

    but they flow anyway....

    what if we dare to love anomalously...
    set off private embarcations
    on the the wings of eternity...
    over the garden of solace,
    through azure skies?
    we would redefine life
    sunrise
    & history
    solving the mystery of divinity
    ...oneness
    what if?

    imagining you and me
    free from
    current involvement...
    l would cherish a second, a minute
    a day with you
    ...but
    it could never be we...
    what if she
    and he could see that for thee
    l would bend to one knee...
    proposing...
    and planning with you

    what if we ate from this tree??
     
  2. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is pure magic. It feels like each line was laid down as gentle as rose petals are to the touch. Very beautiful, you two. Thank you for bringin it.
     
  3. SwtT

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    This was like a beautiful dream...too bad it had to end......the essence of love was on this :) this was a lovely collab you two:)
     
  4. PositiveMindset

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    Very nice, indeed.

    It makes the loveless want to love.

    This is exactly what a collabo is truly about, 2 minds engaging.

    Peace.
     
  5. Khasm13

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    awwwwwwwwwwwww ish......
    i aint even going to say nothing more
    then from what i see
    ya'll got an cohesively bonded chemistry...lol
    supa tyte...

    i wish i could write love pieces like this
    peace
    khasm
     
  6. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautiful...
     
  7. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a beautiful Collab.. Angel.. and j'hiah
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice indeed...love it
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gempis it’s not just a feeling,…..each line was laid down as gentle as rose petals are to the touch, lol
    Thanks for the words…you always know the right thing to say…Much love to you!



    Swt-t, yeah the ending kinda leaves that question mark in your mind…
    I guess there will have to be a part II, Much luv to you…Thanks!



    Positive…I completely agree, a collab should embody two voices…as one,
    Thank you for the words…It let me know we had achieved a goal. Much luv to you!



    Khasm…my favorite brother…your words are on point and what’s this about wishing
    you could write love Poetry like this…now I know I’ve seen you drop some that pulled
    the heart strings, lol…Peace



    Lovely, HODEE, Mzblkangel……….Thanks for taking the time to drop us a line of support,
    it’s truly felt. Much luv to all of you and Thanks!
     
  10. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a wonderful co-loveration. Looking to see part 2!!
    E
     
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