Black Poetry : What I love/hate about men!

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  1. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What I love/hate about men, is the tendency to be
    a lover but not a friend.
    Making promises they know they will never keep.
    And how they disrupt your sleep, when they really
    want to creep.

    What I love/hate about men, is the tenderness that seeps
    in. The strength they give when in love and how when you
    trust them it's all you can think of.
    The warmth of his embrace, the ectasy on his face.
    The grin from a dinner well cooked...and the get away
    surprise that he booked.

    What I love/hate about men, is the lack of conversation.
    It's not a sign of weakness to talk about your feelings.
    But this male indoctrination has my mind and soul just
    reeling.
    The uncertainty of his touch, when you yearn for him so
    much. Is he loving someone else...Does he even love himself?

    What I love/hate about men, is the courage that they show.
    When you say you can't take it any mo...you want them out
    the door. And he finds the strenth to say the words you waited
    for every day! I LOVE YOU! Does he mean it when he speaks,
    or is it just to make me weak?

    What I love/hate about men, is how they confuse good sex
    with good love...the climax representative of the racing of your
    heart and the anxiety when you part...will we have this moment
    again...can he treat me as good as he treats his friend.
    Will this madness ever end?

    What I love/hate about men, is the obscure moments of silence
    when we do the unthinkable and ask them what's on their mind.
    And the response is "NOTHING"! Well you know it is a lie.
    So you sit in silence as time slips by. Until one day you stop
    asking, cause you stop caring...could you be so daring...
    and just open your mouth as readily as you open your fly.

    What I love/hate about men, is when they say they will call...
    and then...they don't, and won't...Do you call and confront
    and be labeled as neurotic? It's enough to make a girl psychotic.
    Loving you makes life brand new, but sometime's it's not enough.
    We need a dialogue or our love is really futile...what would you
    do to make me smile! I would walk a country mile!

    What I love/hate about men, is when the love finally calls...
    they decide to screen them...not knowing she might really
    be the one , who is worth you coming undone. It's not always
    going to be fun, but you should at least face it instead of run.
    Loving you is not easy, you say you want to please me.
    I want you to stay present in the moment...

    What I love/hate about men, is this pattern they can be in.
    Sex on certain days and the guys on another, I don't want
    to nag and don't want to be your mother, don't want to smother
    I need my space too. And when we make love and the loving
    is so deep...I want to talk and cuddle and you want to go to sleep.

    What I love/hate about men , is that I can't live without ya!
    I don't even want to try, what's your alibi, is it cause there
    are so many of us and so few of you that you juggle women
    the way that you do? Take time and discover you had it all in
    me...if it's freedom that you are seeking you are Free to be free
    with me.

    What I love/hate about men, is this constant power struggle.
    I am an old fashion woman with no problems with submission...
    but I do not give you permission to lead when you are so clearly
    lost...what's the cost? Two lost souls instead of one! Is this the
    project you so anxiously are trying to get done? To break me
    and remake me and then leave me alone...saying "You are not
    the woman I fell in love with!" Well you are responsible for the
    change.

    What I love/hate about men is the dillema we are in...can I be
    your lover and your friend.? I want to feel the way I always did
    that men are such a blessing, only when with my head you are
    not messing! Loving you is a battle that I sometimes think is like
    Vietnam or Iraq, should have never been there and now I can't get
    back.

    But when I say I love/hate men, don't be mistaken my friend.
    I love you, I love you yes I do...I just sometimes hate your ways.
    Especially on those days when I am the least important in your
    world...but you claim I am your woman/your girl!
    Especially when I have made you the priority after God in my world!

    BJS(C)2004
    * This is not a male bashing piece, it is a cry for open dialogue.
    Feel free to add your flow as I really need to know...
    Lovingly yours to my Black Kings! :peace:
     
  2. Royal_T

    Royal_T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW....This is absolutely beautiful. You know I'm in your personal fan club anyway, but this is so true. It hits on so many valid points. Especially the part about women calling and then they label you neurotic. How many times have I seen women go through that one. Nice skrybe.
     
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    I'm interested to see what responses you get from the male scribes. You layed this out from a to z, all the bliss and confusion of a male female relationship.
     
  4. msluciousb

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    Thanks Ladies, I was feeling this so deep!

    As you said watzinaname, I am interested to see what the fella's have to say!
    Thanks for reading and responding...

    RoyalT-Much love my sister, I appreciate your loyalty, you are always there
    for me...I have not forgotten about Syleena...I need her info again though...
    we are in transition at the mag so just be patient with me...even give them
    my email at the magazine...[email protected]
    view us at www.awarenessmagazine.net
    Blessings on Your House!
     
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    This is cool in the sense of it's poetic flow
    Cuz U lettin' your thoughts be known,
    but U can't put all men in the same gategory
    cuz of traits some fools have shown.
    Just like all black people don't use the word *****,
    And all sisters aren't golddiggers...
    That's like sayin' that all homeless people are lazy
    or they became homeless cuz they were crazy.
    Cuz U have some of us that believe in settin'
    the woman on a throne made of gold,
    Who worship the woman like she's the gift of God
    4 man 2 treasure & behold.
    But there are some ladies who I hesitate 2 refer 2 as women,
    cuz they trick 4 treats & devour hearts like seasoned meats
    and take 4 granted the love that they're given.
    As 4 me, I have no problem with speaking my mind,
    I love a woman I can converse with
    Holding deep, meaningful conversations about the plight of mankind
    2 our disagreements behind politics.
    Next time, please seperate the types cuz contrary 2 popular belief,
    all men ain't dogs...
    When U find the right one who'll love U 4 U you'll take the chain of blame off,
    and realize that he's just a sweet pussycat.

    All sed, nice piece.
     
  6. msluciousb

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    All things considered it's all good!

    I appreciate you responding and I like that you speak your mind.
    Read again, I never reffered to all men as dogs as that would make
    me a hypocrite as I am in a loving long term relationship and for the
    most part have had good experiences with my brothers. Of all writers
    I realize that people will read in to it what they want to..But no one likes to be
    misunderstood. So know that I do not think all men are dogs, this poem was
    about the disparity in relationships as a whole since I am a woman I speak
    from the womans point of view...LOVING OUR BLACK MEN , IS MY HONOR!
    Much respect, and thanks for you honest opinon.
    BLESSINGS ON YOUR HOUSE! :huh: :huh: :huh: :grouphug: :grouphug:
     
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    My Queen, I do overstand that U haven't & don't refer 2 all men as dogs, and I totally feel where you're coming from with this piece, but when U use the word men, it seems as if U lump them together into one pot.

    Please do forgive me if I misunderstood, but understand I'm damaged goods due 2 the constant malebashing I do witness on the regular.
     
  8. msluciousb

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    BUT YOU ARE NOT ONE OF THEM!

    You are not one of them so I don't want you to take it personal.
    Like I have learned on this site , we have to accept that sometimes
    the person is venting or relaying a story not their own...we need to
    feel free to express the good and the bad and go on from their.
    You are not one of them...Not a nikka and not a player from the words that
    you speak...I know you are a strong although opinionated man...I see you
    as a sweet romantic, concientious brother, always looking for the postivemindset!
    OK! Lets agree to disagree! And know I have written more poems about black on black love
    than I have about the negative crap... y'all get enough of that from traditional media!
    I hope we can just feel the flow and respect each other for what the piece is ....
    Feel me? Know me ? and Understand me!

    Blessings On your house! :kiss:
     
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    reverse order from a man side of the glass
    flow on
     
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    Girl, you done did it now. I KNOW one of my brothers got an answer... Don't we men? :deal:
     
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