Black Poetry : What I feel like

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MrMister, May 2, 2005.

  1. MrMister

    MrMister Member MEMBER

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    words cant express the storms my mind create
    I will not accept my life is my own creation so it must be faith
    that I have seen what I have seen
    that I can only find peace in a dream
    when awake I feel a rage not known to me
    when awake I wanna cry but my pride stops me
    not a tear shall be shed not for this life I lead
    not a tear shall be shed not by me nor my family
    I wish I could let the demons in me heart rest
    everyone tells me from emotions love is the best
    but it escapes me everytime
    so I accept the fact that love wont be mine
    as I spiral down a line of hopelessnes
    i reach out but all I get is lonelyness​

    this is a old piece of mine just thought Id share it
    with yall
    tell me what u think
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i likes this wow so much emotions was placed here
    yet i understand this scribe thanks for sharing
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    likes this scribe...wheeeew

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    ephlat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very good poem. real men cry. let it out. lol
     
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    Welcome MrMister, and thanks for sharing your thoughts.

    I am looking forward to seeing more of your musings. Peace.
     
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    thnx 4 the feed back people
     
  6. Onichika

    Onichika Active Member MEMBER

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    nice poem. I can identify with waking up from a deam and raging at your reality.
     
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    I've felt like this 4 so long, tryin' 2 cry but the eyes remain dry.

    So instead of feelin' like I'm losin' my mind, I peace myself out like...

    It could be worse, I could be paralyzed wishin' that there'd be an end 2 my life.

    But I still Be.

    Very nice piece.

    Peace.
     
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    thnx for the replys
    really apreciate it
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like what i have just
    read. The realness of it
    is touching my heart
    nice piece
     
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    and there you are :)



    :rolleyes: i,m happy you shared some of youre work with us...

    youre poems touch...


    and i can relate to this one..



    :grouphug: welcome to the fam Bro...



    just know that youre father loves you :rain:



    and that you can walk over the street (lol :wink:)
    and knock on my door ....


    and ask for the umbrella :)







    Lovelibertylady:heart:
     
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