Black Poetry : What I’m Saying is…

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  1. waynethomas

    waynethomas Active Member MEMBER

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    How I was raised,
    When asked,
    Is reflected back on
    Like a sketch of intricate well-read plays,
    Of complex displays of
    How my mother installed this man in to a system
    That even with all your experience,
    Needed is a moment to understand
    What you only took in and understood yesterday.

    But it’s this
    Very same system has brought me in front of you.
    And my mind is consumed with thoughts now of your
    Initial notion of me.

    And within these few minutes of meeting you,
    I find myself
    Trying to understand the history of events on
    Why there would never be anyone in your eyes that
    Will be good enough for you.

    How
    No one will be able to mount the required respect for your view,
    Allowing you to
    Release this tense grip of these delving questions.
    The inquisitive questions,
    I know I answered in all honesty
    As felt that this was the only way of showing you
    That all I can show is the truth.

    And tonight has given me this opportunity
    Which I have been able to show this all to you,
    And it has taken all evening but the truth you now see…

    But a triumph found only after a few moments of conversation?
    Surely this is too easy!

    Because during her mental preparation with me
    Told me to simply be... “Cool”
    But linked that with another line
    That they felt it was necessary at the time to include
    That “The walls of Jericho or more likely to fall…”
    So please understand my expressions of being sceptical.

    What I’m trying to say is…
    My conduct will always articulate louder than my words.

    And rather than me applying layers of feelings
    Accompanied by a hand full of supporting verbs –
    Which comes now effortlessly to me,
    As my books pay handsomely for my words to affect the world as they read –
    I want the
    Smiles seen from your daughter,
    Exposing her new found belief in man,
    After discovering this man,
    And each one of the verses she is heard to have expressed
    On what me being in hear life now means to she,
    Add up and
    All is testimony to every doubting question you will ever have for me.

    And if after looking at your only child
    Your not filled with the confidence that
    My hand,
    Mind and heart
    Will not be strong enough to take lead,
    Ill simply leave.

    But with the risk on what I know that will do,
    Base my confidence that my intentions
    Towards your exquisite daughter to be constantly true.
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reflect yourself ~

    VERY POWERFUL :hulk:
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    word
    Me likes :)
    Good stuff Brotha
    Thats quite a well prepared promise to your beloved's parents
    I think that any good parent would LOVE to hear these words coming from their daughters suitor :read:
    Props Poet :read: :)
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow speechless!
     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was excellent...real deep...I see you traveled well inside yourself to pull out the realness in this flo...

    great piece
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow powerful, plain and simple
     
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    waynethomas:
    Really like the way you laid this out
    But oh so feeln' this statement:


    My conduct will always articulate louder than my words.

    Nothing but the truth.


    Much Luv
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Never an easy position to be in, many mate's families don't think anyone is quite up to par. How does one even go about proving that they are. You said it best, by just doing what you normally do for her, and then they will see with their own eyes. Well done poet.
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL...

    after reading this I felt proud! Walk that talk!
    I enjoyed this poet!


    Be Blessed!



    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep & strong words indeed well felt
     
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