Black Poetry : What else can I do?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HODEE, Aug 31, 2008.

  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I hope you slept well​

    I am up its 5 AM
    The emotions in me all night swelled

    I am so disappointed in you

    You think you have strength to stand
    Against what you now believe is my abuse
    So you can’t see your man

    I haven’t changed
    Along the way I changed things

    They may not and were not what you liked
    I did all

    I did and you can’t see
    I did them
    To continue our way of life

    All the financial decisions I made
    I wrestled with each one for days

    The decisions I made not to go certain places
    I pondered and I wrung my hands

    All I see now
    Is your immaturity

    You’re selfish
    And you can’t have your way

    If you want to be a child about this
    That is fine

    Today I need a grown up here
    With me today
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There are those times when we just don't know what more we can do, after all it does take two. Hopefully two will be able to converse and have a meeting of the minds, real talk, as real as the way this piece was posed.
     
  3. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It becomes hard for two to become one
    When one or both believe the other
    Have changed things

    Changed them to something that they aren't happy with
    But changed them so they work again if understood

    Sometimes without knowing
    Things Become something they no longer understand
    It can happen to a woman, and it can happen to any man

    The only thing I think
    That one can do
    Is not loose sight
    Of who is working to be with you

    The material things come
    The material things they go
    The lights were never turned off the gas was always on too
    The frig was full of food
    The rent is always paid
    There was enough left over
    A vacation together can be made

    Not sure what the unhappy is
    Can't get no communication
    Honest explanation of what the upset is about

    Year in year out they stand their ground
    Walking around each other but not together anymore
    Bottom line it is time to go
    So clear heads can see
    Minds figure the good that it be
    They both lost
     
  4. YungMiss

    YungMiss Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow great write I totally agree.. when someone makes sacrafices to keep the household going they should be shown some appreciation..and thanked for all the things they did do instead of pointing out the things they didnt..especially if the things they didnt do you could live without.. there isnt nearly enough appreciation going on around in some relationships.. people tend to get selfish and make things about them..saying oh i was at work all day making money..but dont consider how the person felt who was at home holding the fort down.. both parties have to make sacrafices sometimes..

    One again nice write Id take a man like that anyday! lol
     
  5. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you YungMiss

    " there isnt nearly enough appreciation going on "

    Watz Thanks for the read

    Conversation is key. Getting it started, keeping the topic focused and positive is difficult. Another key is not giving up, but knowing when it isn't working and time to quit.

    YungMiss you said this and it is so true.
    " Both parties have to make sacrafices "
     
  6. LovesDestiny

    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great scribe poet! I especially loved the above quote! It's sad to EVER get caught up in the material stuff because when it's all said and done, those things can never define true happiness!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    lack of communication when one is giving all and the other half not giving thankz
    it leaves a divided mixture and false dreams
     
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    Wow BRO! TWO Hard Hitting Flows in one!
    Speak on!!!!!!
     
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