Black Poetry : What Do You Want From Me?

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  1. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Some one to hold your hand?
    Or someone to hold at night?
    What do you want from me?
    Someone to listen to your problems?
    Hug? Kiss?
    Or just stand beside you?
    Your biggest cheerleader?
    Or maybe just a silent companion?
    Maybe a lifetime lover?
    Maybe just your best friend?
    Maybe I’d like to be all that and more
    But I don’t know what you want from me
    It would be so much easier if you would just tell me
    I can’t stand not knowing
    But I guess you can’t either
    So I’ll just let you know that I don’t want anything from you
    The only thing I want is you
     
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    I like this sentiment. If more people were like you, we'd all be better off. Good write.
     
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    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dauym.... so nice....... beautifully written... keep them coming

    "You know what I want from you,
    I want you to keep real and just be you,
    I wouldn't mine you being a friend,
    maybe someone 'down' to the end...
    but the thing is.... I love you and I can't deny,
    if this is real... h*ll yeah.... I can fly"
     
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    sweet flow
     
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    this is so tyte!
     
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    very straight-forward for real :) I like ya delivery :)
    go head sista :)
     
  7. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dayum i am going thru this right now! u took the words right out of my mouth! nice flow...
     
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    I enjoyed simplistic realism in this piece.

    Great title by the way. lol

    Q1
     
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    Everything and nothing at all

    Very Nice. Renee

    Some one to hold your hand? - this would be a start.
    Or someone to hold at night? - To chase away the dark
    What do you want from me? - I may not be so sure.
    Someone to listen to your problems? - This would be amour
    Hug? Kiss? - Yes these things I long and miss.
    Or just stand beside you? - This would be the bomb
    Your biggest cheerleader? - Sometimes yes. I can be yours too.
    Or maybe just a silent companion? - Quiet time with you
    Maybe a lifetime lover? - Lets not track the time
    Maybe just your best friend? - This would be devine.

    All these things combined as one, makes you special in my heart. The part you play in my life today. May not be done defined.
    I really need someone like you to understand my mind. :D
     
  10. true love

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    very beautiful and i can relate totally...i wish it were so easy to just come right out and say it. much love