Black Poetry : What do you see?

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  1. lil_ms_sweets

    lil_ms_sweets New Member MEMBER

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    Look unto me
    what is it that you truely see
    Look within my eyes
    within my soul
    How shall you read me
    How shall you know

    Do you see my true feelings for you
    or are you still blind...
    Blind to the window of my heart that is
    As you examine my soul, what might you find

    Take a good look
    Dont leave not one emotion unseen
    Make this discovery sincere
    Make our future serine

    Yes, just as I tought, you have not stumbled upon that door
    The door of my love for you in which I speak
    Or maybe you have, you just chose to have it ignored
    I do not panic, I do not rush.
    I wait for you to come to me
    With desire and the erge to love, with more than just lust. :heart: :love:
     
  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to Destee lil_ms_sweet

    This is very nice. I enjoyed reading it.

    Read a book from left to right.
    Read me from inside out.


    It should be obvious at first glance
    that you have a lot to offer the right man.

    Eyes wide open if not he is blind.
    Look deeper into her eyes.

    Don't stop at her outer form, you'll
    miss the best part of her inner beauty.

    If it isn't obvious in the first hour,
    after asking a few questions and getting a reply.
    Then he isn't the one that deserves your time.
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I hear what you're saying, true love tends to hang around long after disappointments occur. Hopefully he will see the light, seems to be shining brightly enough. Well written piece, welcome to destee, hope to be reading more from you.
     
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    welcome to the house of destee's
    the poetic playground
    welcome to the home u found
    welcome from above as i bless you some love
    tyte drop look to read more of you poeticly
     
  5. lil_ms_sweets

    lil_ms_sweets New Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for giving me a warm welcome. You will here more from me.

    ~Merry Christmas~ *Happy
    New
    Year*
     
  6. blklespoet

    blklespoet Member MEMBER

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    Girl that was really good. I liked the flow and mood of the poem. I have actually been in that same situation on both sides. You are a really good poet and put your emotions in words very well.
    :bellydance: