Quiet Poetry Lounge : WHAT DID I DO WRONG?

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  1. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHAT DID I DO WRONG?

    What have I done to you, that you haven't already done to me?
    you robbed my heart, stole my soul...and you did it so selfishly.
    :spinstar:
    I promised myself...and I promised you too,
    that I'd be with you to the end,
    yeah, you turned me out, without a doubt
    then left me here alone...to mend.
    :spinstar:
    The healing was slow...but it eventually came,
    and I admit, I got caught up, in this silly game.
    :spinstar:
    You walked on my heart...with your shoes on,
    and we both know it's time...so just move on.
    :spinstar:
    Did I strip you of your pride,
    when I asked you for my key?
    :spinstar:
    Do you remember when we met,
    you were down on bended knees?
    :spinstar:
    Well you raised up from your knees,
    and you put your Queen down there.
    you displayed quite well,
    that...you no longer care.
    :spinstar:
    But I wish you well...and I pray that you make it,
    cause if the tides ever hit you, my heart couldn't take it
    :spinstar:
    Cause I loved you long...
    and I loved you hard,
    but I learned so well...
    how to love from...afar.
    :spinstar:
    So take care of yourself...please do that for me,
    and good things will come...just try it and see.

    :spinstar: p.s. :spinstar:
    We'll meet up again...somewhere down those roads...
    and maybe we'll "re-love"...but only God knows.​
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The questions a heartbroken soul can ask. Emotively phrased, and I like the fact that the soul knows how to continue on. Well written piece.
     
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    I really loved this poem, it caused me to smile...
    how you gather your words, and do it with style.
    We balance one another, but you may want to fight,
    for slowly but surely you're housing my site ! :huh:
    but what can I say, you won't leave it alone,
    and just like a wife, my sites now your home.
    So take off your shoes, and pick up your pen,
    and lay down your words that come from deep within,
    cause now is the time, for all who can see,
    this poetess you are is just a reflection of me ! :heart:
     
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    this hit me like a ton of bricks...wow
    maybe because I've so felt this before
    on so many levels at different times
    in my life as a woman coming of age...

    wow...Incredible piece... :bowdown:

    Lightening was striking on this piece...
     
  5. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We got to know when to hold em, ..and when to fold em. As always...thanks for the luv.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you like my work...had a good teacher. I love you
     
  7. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So many times for me as well...but who's counting? :) ...thanks for the love you always leaves at my door.
    much luv to ya...queentswana
     
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    :spinstar: Very Nice :spinstar:

    Mending the heart,never knowing the limit, time or solution.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    what seem wrong is the opening of mending hearts & souls
    this was so sweet and well pose'd ....expression is powerful
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How right you are, thanks for stopping by to show some luv.
     
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