Black Poetry : What could this be?

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  1. choclatangel

    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Enormously overwhelmed by this entity that seems to swirl
    Within my mind, body, heart, soul and spirit
    Although not a physical being I see it
    stretched out before me in vivid blue and purple ripples
    As if a quite pond has been disturb, by
    pebbles being thrown into the wishing well of my essence
    What could this be???
    Testing out my boundaries
    Mentally imprisoning me,
    From my own self destructions
    What could this be?
    No other way to describe this than to tell it like it is
    So let me illustrate for you the simplicity.
    I feel myself racing against time and across space
    Running towards wat…Running away from wat?
    I don’t know…
    I feel something great, just on the horizon…
    if only I could let go, of what I just don’t know
    Slowly my fear and apprehension are dissipating
    Leaving me wondering
    what could this be?
    With each ticking of the tocking clock
    The fog within my mind seems to clear, dissolve
    Leaving behind only the purity of ethereal beauty
    What could this be???
    I think I know…
    My love for you has finally broken free
    of the webs of lies and uncertainties.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well then ..........express on and free ya self
    this was awesomely poes'd and tyte ..........
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Gracious! You just sparkin the vibe here.....I love the wanting and anticipation in this piece....how you set it up....takes a poet of thinkin to do that....

    "Slowly my fear and apprehension are dissipating
    Leaving me wondering
    what could this be?
    With each ticking of the tocking clock
    The fog within my mind seems to clear, dissolve
    Leaving behind only the purity of ethereal beauty
    What could this be???
    I think I know…
    My love for you has finally broken free
    of the webs of lies and uncertainties."


    You nailed it....that stanza is so open, so freeing, so filled with release it's mind-boggling.....a mature and alluring write, Choc.
    For some reason, Im not shocked. Ive read you before.
    Love the verbals and descriptions here......